My heart bleeds
As I cry an endless stream of tears
Time for change
Difference
Unwelcome
But needed
Offered up to a god
The offer refused
Life hanging in the balance
And the balance is frayed
That is why my heart bleeds
And tears fall
Inequity at every turn
And amazing beauty elusive
Hidden under the veil of pessimistic truths
And lies
Broken for the shortest of moment
At least once
That is why my heart bleeds
And tears fall
Can't un-see what has been seen
Can't hide from a beauty which I know exists
Despite the eternal gloom
There is light
So that is why my heart bleeds
And why my tears fall
Author notes
I was listening to music, and I decided to write, it was just that, I wrote
Written September 2nd, 2004
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wow wow this is so awesome dont change anything
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stylish
i liked it...especially the part 'hidden under the veil of pessimistic truths', good line. well thanx for those points =D and take care man -
this is another great write/poem! i lve the lines : My heart bleeds
As I cry an endless stream of tears
Time for change
Difference
Unwelcome
But needed
Offered up to a god
The offer refused
Life hanging in the balance
And the balance is frayed
That is why my heart bleeds
And tears fall
great lines! amazing write.poem i agree with trillana amazing but sad poem!
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This is amazing... sad though, very sad. I really love just... the feeling within this poem... awesome... just like all your other writes!
Keep pennin Lewis!
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enlighting
i liked it. it's a lil rough in some spots, but it's good. no matter what you do, you can't escape light. i like that. -
Perfect
I like the repitition of:
That is why my heart bleeds
And tears fall
It helps the picture of the poem be more 'vibrant'. You have a unique style of writing. It is different and un-poser like. Thanks for sharing!
<3 Kayla Dawn -
very true, very over used themes, but considering that I trying to beat writers block, I think this isn't bad, at least considering that fact anyway, but thanks for the comment
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The language flows really smoothly, you use repittion well (though you do have a lot of really over used themes). But it's still good, really done well.
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sounds pretty. I like it. I guess I am too tired to understand it today. I'll also read it tommorrow to see if I get it perfectly in my little head. sounds pretty though.
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