“Behold, my smoothened edges,”
Said one pebble to another,
“And behold my starfish fossil,
Which was passed down from my mother.
How my greyness glows with radiance,
So solidly ornate.
Yes, I’m such a perfect specimen
Of all that’s truly great.”
Then the other pebble answered,
“There’s no magnitude we lack,
And I too am silky smooth
With flecks of orange on my back.
We are just the peak of prominence,
The treasure of the tide,
I’m a polished hunk of granite,
With an ammonite inside.”
As they spoke, a grain of sand looked on,
“Oh, foolish stones,” it said.
“You are young and inexperienced,
And easily misled.
‘Though you think your handsome features
Make you great throughout the land,
There’s a beauty found with aging,
Which you fail to understand.”
Both the pebbles looked impassive,
“Why you’re tiny through and through,
You are old and insignificant,
And dull and boring too.”
But the grain, it smiled contently
In that awesome stretch of sand,
And it knew that in a thousand years
They too would understand.
Author notes
Not funny, i know! Not supposed to be though, so is okay! I'm waiting for somebody to actually know what this is about - i'm not sure it's very clear! But I'm sure some smartass out there must know! (Prolly not you, mr birks! 
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Written September 2nd, 2004
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yep...agree
Eddy
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kind of humerous, I liked it, great work, awesome job, oh sorry I thought I said cookies, wait I did, darn, I'll have to send you one after I make some more.
I kind of sort of ate them all. 
thanks for the comment, I really appreciate it.
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Excellent
Everyone above me figured it out first...lol..I love anything about the ocean..excellent write Helen -
Now that's just what I needed to hear with the big four-o round just round the bend and neither my brakes nor the REALLY expensive face creams I trowel on day and night seem to be working!
I think I like the new philosphical (or should that be soppyphysical) side. Got anything encouraging about saggy boobs or altzheimers up your sleeve??
Kyla XX -
A totally cool poem about aging. I really dig the idea of sand as an ex-pebble, and sand and pebbles having feelings--that's cool all over! This is wonderful.
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Birksy - get outta my head! of course this is where the pebbles will end up - scattered from Rhyl to Cornwall, but bec I really like this one. It flows so well, it's a metaphor for life really. We all look impressive at some point in our lives but of course it never lasts - unless of course it's you or me we're talking about
Yep - I like this one - you've been reading the dictionary again haven't you?
~Von~
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I thought your dialogues added fun to this piece, the meaning quite clear yet hard to agree with when one third of the adult American population is on the goverment payroll. Old every thing but wise, though some are wiseguys, their more of a cancer that left "untreated" brings the end to us all. Oops sorry election year here.
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I thought your dialogues added fun to this piece, the meaning quite clear yet hard to agree with when one third of the adult American population is on the goverment payroll. Old every thing but wise, though some are wiseguys, their more of a cancer brings the end to us all. Oops sorry election year here.
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That's precisely what it's about! Yea!
Thanks for being clever!
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This is truly wonderful. I think the main thing you're trying to portray is that with age comes wisdom and a beauty only time and experience can bring. This is how I took it anyway. This is an extemely good write. Congrats! Well done.
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Pearls right!!!
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Now - my thoughts on this are... that the pebbles will become millions of grains of sand in the future, so that's why they'll understand... Also, they'll realise that it's not how you look, but it's how you've lived your life that matters... however, that's prolly crap because I think I've been thinking too much already... When I read it just then, it read beautifully... so I was just being a lil bit of a pillock earlier... love u wally. xxx
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