Red rich earth stomped and scattered
by cloven hooves dancing the
finale of death
chosen for bravery proud in
his magnificent sweating flanks
heave with effort
evading knifes edge of the
jesters facing his opponent with
bravado and pride he stands out
as a favourite to the crowd in
awe as he stands his ground
the final seconds tick blood red
is the coat that swaggers before
him taunting daring summoning
strength that deserted him he takes that
step forward to a hero's death
a silence follows as his soul departs
and the tribute is paid for his courage........
Author notes
I dislike blood sports, but needed to write this.
Written September 1st, 2004
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Thank you for your kind comments, they are appreciated
Sadly I think Oscar wilde was right, too often man feels he has the right to do dispicable things in the name of "Gentlemens sport". Perhaps one day we will all have rights, man and Nature
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yea over here we have fox hunting...the unspeakable after the uneatable as Oscar Wilde said..powerful portrayal of the nobility of nature
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Yes Renee, I have to agree with you, it is a hatred with me also
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YesI have to agree, I will work on it thanks for you comments, they are appreciated
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Excellent
Wonderful poem! I thought it was magnificent. Very powerful. Keep the work up, cutiepie!!
Guinevere -
Good poem - not all that long, but for some reason this poem stands out like an "epic" with so much said in these few lines. One could use this poem as an allegory of many things. Kind of sad in a way - but also very heroic and inspiring. If only we could die with such grace!
Sherlock -
your poem is great , but it is soooooo sad. I saw one bullfight in Spain one time , I vomited violently and to be completely honest I wanted the Matador to be the one who met his demise , the same as i want all the ones that fight cocks and dogs etc , to be tortured to death. I am a very gentle person I think , but I see red when i see what is being done to poor defenseless animals .....this poem should be posted somewhere as a protest against animal cruelty
Reenie
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This is really good. Very enjoyable, although I agree with CandyFaerie, you need punctuation. But I understand that they can get pretty annoying, but our 7th grade English teacher bored them into our head last year, so I use them. Great write! Keep up the great work!
God bless you,
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Erika ~~~~~
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Thank you Pierre, I am pleased you enjoyed it
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it thank you for your support, I appreciate it
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it
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excellent
Very well done.
Nicely penned, even if you don't like blood sports this came out good!
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amazing
Wow, what a strong piece! Really beautifully written and quite emotional, I loved it! Great descriptions of the chaos at hand, whether in the man's emotion or the generalization of the piece, great job, nicely written! Keep up the FANTASTIC work cutiepie!
Purplerose
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Good powerful work, that is very good
David -
Thank you for your kind words, they are greatly appreciated.
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Powerful poem…and it does sort of seem like a sport event hero is the focus but it seems to me to be more than that. I see in this a echo of the past of what hero’s were supposed to be…throwing themselves into whatever noble cause and willing to be consumed in the process. Mythical and legendary in scope. Well written and evocative. Thanks for sharing this and for commenting on my poem “Blue cat” and i have only seen one “blue” it did indeed have a moon face. Remarkable that you saw the physical connection within the lines of the poem as I was reaching for the mystic and you saw right down into the inspiration.
Marvelous!
Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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I will be doing some work on the punctuation, but I find I have to study it for a while before I know where to put the dots and thinggy's
Glad it got cleared up for you
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hmmm...i found it a little hard to follow witout any punctuation. I don't kno where what starts and where it ends! But I like your ending. it clears everything up! very nice!
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