Silence
seems to clash
with the walls
inside my head.
Doorbells ringing
never singing
the hellos
of my mind.
Contradiction
is the picture
I see
before my eyes.
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come to the sea
it's where I will be
join me there
without a care.
come see the sky
as the clouds go by
we are as one
the moon and the sun.
come to the sea
it's where I will be
join me there
without a care.
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open the wings of your mind
clear the cob webs from the ceiling
there is only one
look to the sun
fire burning bright
still is the night
continue on this road
only “he” will know
find the path taken
similar in touch
again you venture
only time tells.
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closed minds
have secrets
longing to be told.
many tales
of yesteryear
hide behind
a veil.
light the candle
in the darkenss
look inside and see
all you need to know and learn
lies right in front of thee
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darkness fills my mind
come inside and see
no light to guide your way
into the depths of “me”
look into the mirror
what you see is me
so be
quiet and smile
hello, can you see
look, can you hear
no light to guide your way
into the depths of “you”
please bare with me, I have no idea what these exactly mean and I have no idea where they are coming from. My mind just goes and doesn't stop.
Author notes
I am not sure where these pieces are coming from but I love them and know they have some meaning.
Written August 31st, 2004
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That was a wonderful piece and an excellent example of stream of conscious thought, lol. I know that sometimes when we ramble on, there are times when REAL nuggets of gold and sparkling gems of truth and beauty surface. I think you were able to capture many in this piece. And by the by, I LOVED that picture at the beginning. Really set the tone of the piece, lol. Great job.
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Thank you and I too like free writing. These pieces just came out, some word by word others full on sentences. I am not sure where they came from, it's not my normal writing. Glad you enjoyed them.
Hugs and bites, Lady Raven -
I hope that my work can make people think and visualize. Thanks frozentears for reading and commenting.
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Thank you , I am glad you enjoyed it.
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I did change ur to your. I am glad you enjoyed it besides that part.
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I am thinking of separating them but didn't want them broken up for the reason of them being overlooked. So, maybe later I will make a collection. Glad you liked them.
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Thank you for reading this piece. it is a real place I do to.
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Thank you very much Leeche, I am glad you enjoyed it.
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Excellent
A realisation of ones self with a guide through the process. Universal words of a universal religion, excellent heart searching and realisation. Good flow from the source.
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It feels as though you were some kind of motivational speaker or yoga instructor or something guiding us..it's a nice poem...
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Very Awesome
I enjoyed that deeply. I understood that... *laughs*... belive that or not i actually did..Great poem! -
i agree that these should perhaps be separated when you're happy with them, and molded into different pieces. there are solid messages in some parts, others are filler, in a sense. at any rate, they belong in separate parts. peace, jc.
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They are beautiful! I think, maybe, you should separate them and maybe make a collection list just for them, because though they are very different there is a subtle vague common thread through all of them. I especially lik ethe second to last piece - it is beautifully written and all the words have such longing, nostalgic and enigmatic connotations. Terrific job!
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ummm.. this is very unlike me, but i would like for you to make a hand written copy of these and mail them to me. if you have no objection i will give you my info through IM.
anyway, this is some truly good ass shit. even if you dont know what its from. -
Some good imagery here, I enjoyed reading, just perhaps one thing you might want to alter, where you use ur instead of your, that part took me away from what you were saying and thinking of the 'ur'. Other than that, a great series of verse.
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Wow , Very good poem . I really enjoyed it . Keep up the good work
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Beautiful, it has a lot of meaning.
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well-done
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I like free writing. It was very interesting to read something emotional without it going over board. You had a clear idea of what to write. Good Job
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Wow this presents so much to think about! Looking deep inside one's self and truely seeing what is there! We all need to take the time and take a step back and look into ourselves to see the big picture. The important things that we all too often miss. Beautiful writing!
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Good!
These pieces work quite well put together like this, they do stray from each other a bit but still work somehow. I'm not keen on chat speak being used in poetry but if that's your bag then go with it. Interesting combo none the less, random thoughts can sometimes be the best ones we have.
~Samantha
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well-done
i truly do like this one it made me think for a sec but not too hard thank god lol good one -
na
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