"What I wanted to say was- was- The weather's great today... (Nervous) Did you know that not all flamingos are pink?"(awkward, unsteady, heart racing with questions I wouldn't dare to ask.)
"And did you know-
(That since the moment I tasted the air that you breathe, the split second your eyes hit mine, and I was lost in a daze of oh-la-la, I pictured our wedding, You were there and I was here, with a bouqet of flowers but instead of being in my palms they were a crown on my head and the pastel pattern of petals formed the words 'I love you'. Did you know I worship you and dream of what our children might look like, your crystal pale blue eyes, and my flaming red hair, I'd braid our daughters hair every night in my sleep and I didn't realize 'till I awoke that I had was braiding my own hair and there were knots all over the place. I'm glad I finally grew brave enough to tell you all this and I know you love me to, please say you do...)
There's a quiz tommorow in algebra, did you study for it?"
"Hey, Derek! What are you-
(Thinking about? Me? Because your always on my mind. I saw a shooting star last night and you know what I wished for? For you to be here with me, sitting under the moonlight maybe sipping a glass of champane, on a picnic blanket, while I feed you grapes, the sweetest I could find. And after the fireflies came out to spy on us we might have been scandalous and made love under the oak tree with the stars glimmering anticipating our every move.)
doing?"
(*Sigh*, come out with it, come with it! Why can't I say what I feel and feel what I say?
Mean that I love you and know you mean it too? Why am I bound to only dreaming because I'm too scared of living it? It might be better left in a dream.)
Author notes
This was number 4 on your list in case you didn't notice. Thank you for this contest it gave me alot of inspiration.
Written August 30th, 2004
A contest entry
- TRIBUTE to a BrOken heart!!! PREWRITES ALLOWED...lots of choices. by mascararunning.
300 points, ended September 5, 2004, 99 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You think so? I have to write a monolouge soon for my Drama class. I love acting that's probably why I can write good monolouges.
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I love this poem! Its so kool. I lvoe the way you say wut ur thinking and then u say wut u really said. THis is true for most girls. but sometimes living in the fantasy world can be alot beter that the harshness of real life..keep writing, your good!
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wow. this is a really cool piece. You'd be very good at monologues. Have you written any?
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I think most girls are braver than guys. It's surprising to hear sometimes that guys have the same insecurities that you have about them. Kinda funny sometimes too.
Poor babies, gotta love em tho right? And thats awesome that you told him. You go girl. 
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Yup, yup; people don't think guys are shy because they have that rough, tough exterior but they are I had no clue my guy liked me back until I told him. girls are sometimes braver then guys, sad but true.
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This is a very good write. It is so true, it's always hard to tell the person you like that you like them, but I think that you shouldnt live in a dream and that you should go for it. You really have nothing to lose, he might be the one you've been waiting for your whole life. Never wait for them to make the first move because guys are shy too.
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By the way I did tell the guy how I felt and tommorow is our 6 month anniversary, so really you should keep your emotions bottled up like I wrote in the poem let yourself, go be free, and take a chance because you only live once.
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this is an interesting piece you have written here
and er... soulessrobin
lol, It depends on how you see it 
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Soulless Robin sounds as though they know what they are talking about. This is actually a very engaging piece
david
ps good luck -
NEVER BETTER LEFT IN A DREAM!!
SPIT IT OUT BABY. IF YOU LIKE A MAN YOU BETTER TELL HIM BECUASE MEN ARE DUMB AND DULL AND THEY WONT EVER CATCH ON UNLESS YOU GET STRAIGHT FORWARD WITH THEM.
at least most of them are dull.
anyhow, thips is a great write--- very cool for a music video-- makes me wanna make one of those too. JESUS-- you inspire me BLOODQUEEN-- I'ma go read your page to find out your name!
Trish
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