Sanity defeats me ,whilst
grappling unknown entities.
Normalresponses elude
me in my time of need;
as a blindfold on blindness;
totally unwarranted assaults
incapacitates me to a former
shell. Fractious nervous ticks
appear as from no-where,
adding insult to injury.
Stress and tension magnifies
all to horrendous proportions;
to breaking point and beyond,
calmer now, equilibrium returns
to a saner face, ticks abate,
adrenalin surges with each
word produced, to compile
peace of mind and a saner
heart..................
Author notes
The struggle to find the ever ellusive words..........
Written August 29th, 2004
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Oh this reads so much better
Thank you for your kindness 
I shall rectify 
Many thanks it is appreciated 
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MMM...if you don't mind, I'm gonna try and punctuate it for you...I'll probably screw it up, but this is how I read it:
Sanity defeats me ,whilst
grappling unknown entities.
Normal responses elude
me in my time of need.
As a blindfold on blindness,
totally unwarranted assaults
incapacitates me to a former
shell. Fractious nervous ticks
appear as from no-where,
adding insult to injury.
Stress and tension magnifies;
all to horrendous proportions;
to breaking point and beyond.
Calmer now, equilibrium returns
to a saner face, ticks abate,
adrenalin surges with each
word produced; to compile
peace of mind and a saner
heart..................
Hope this helps
Lata.
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I have been back and punctuated as best I can it is not my forte but I am grateful for your support, thank you
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First off, thank you so much for the comment on my poem. It's greatly appreciated. Now, onto yours. This was a very interesting concept. I will say that it was a bit hard to follow as there was no punctuation so I couldn't tell when a thought had ended and a new one began. Other than that, excellent use of language and verbs. Very well done. Thanks for sharing. Till next time...
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You are very welcome and thank you for your kind comments on my poems, it is much appreciated
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A wonderfully worded poem with great description A great poem, thanks for commenting on mine and keep up the good work
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Lol that me never take time for a breath I am glad you enjoyed this, thank you for the lind words
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Wow! Another great write! This, too, is a frantic, nervous poem...a style that I like. It's interesting and pulsing and insane...I LOVE IT!!! The whole poem is like a run-on sentence, which is cool because that's how we think. There are no punctuation marks in our thoughts; sometimes we even interrupt ourselves. FABULOUS JOB!
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Thank you for the lovely review I am glad you enjoyed it and yes I will take a peek
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YAY!this is great clever piece of art here.it is hard to find peace ...if it even truely exsist in the world.this is amazing!keep it up! (fancy a peek at my new contest?i'd appreciate if you entered)
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Thank you I am glad you enjoy my poems
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Thank you your kind words encourage me to keep searching
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Another Golden Ray of Spectacularness
Wow wow wow... *clutches lungs for breath* insane! Your work is magically magnificent! For a topic like this, and i'd like to think that this was a tough topic to write on, you did an excellent job. And to me, what's really ironic is you're talking about the toughest words to utter in situations, and you used a very extensive vocabulary in this piece. Very clever! And like all the other pieces that ive read of yours, it's fantastic. You are gifted, mam... very gifted... Great job! Keep up your stunning work!
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woooow, your struggle to find these words does not show, this was really perfect to me, I was impressed right of. nicely done!
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thank you Glad you enjoyed it
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ah but only for an instant.......
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Wow! great choice of words there girl!!
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see, i told you you had something sensible to say
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Thank you, I am glad you like it, makes it all worth while
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Thank you,I find if I am stressed, to write eliminates the panic after I have conquered the words Thank you for your kind words
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sometimes when i read your work
i just can't help but sit back
and sigh... and ask myself
HOW does one do that...
the ending was killer!
this poem had such good flow
deep and dark
served steaming on my mind
thats the way i like em'
damn good write
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Nice job
You did an awesome job with your struggle if these words were allusive to you. I like this format, the words are sliced down and pared down to the base words needed to describe the feelings and emotion in the poem. Nice job. IN fact my favorite line was
calmer now equilibrium returns
to a saner face ticks abate
Nice job!
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