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Two Lives, One Heart

There is not enough time and
Wishing am I,
Only wishing won’t make it come true.

Living more than one life
Is not easy and I’m
Voraciously living in two.
Each life is full, and I’m feeling the pull
So I try to make more time to spare.

Oh, but I have no spell,
No way to compel
Extraction of time from thin air.

Having only one heart,
Each time we part
A piece of it breaks away;
Remaining with you, it is broken in two
Til we once again meet here to play.

Author notes

This is a rhyming acrostic. It is a poem inspired by my "virtual life" (MMORPGS). But who is to say that one life is more real than the other? I am still figuring this out. This was written for a very dear friend.
Written August 29th, 2004

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  • Kristen Corpse
    September 21, 2004
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    Nice work! The rhyming was great! Faint but still noticable! Lots of people can relate to the poem on this page. I know I did.

  • idiosyncraticme
    September 21, 2004
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    This is awesome! the rhyme you have going is just great. It's there, but it's not to much. It's deep to, I think a lot of diverse people can relate to this poem.

  • BeCaUsEoFyOu
    September 21, 2004
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    awesome

    Awesome this is great! And I can really relate. I always feel like I'm living two lives! Great job! Keep writing!

  • nchunn59
    September 21, 2004
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    10/10

    |I loved this it was very nicely written,well understood,one word to be is just perfect another word it perfect and another word is perfect lol does it get better anyway nice work! (even if you should already know that ist is perfect)
    sadie


  • M.A.King
    September 19, 2004
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    yes, here is the link to the poem i was speaking of. this poet did an acrostic in sonnet form. very nice. as with yours the acrostic is there, the meter is there and the rhyme and form too. both are excellent. it makes me want to try one myself. allpoetry.com/poem/812808

  • Lilac Moon silver member
    September 19, 2004
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    Thank you for so much for your comments! This was my first attempt at something like this, and I didn't know it was a recognized form and that there was a name for it (until Sadelmann told me -- thanks, Sadelmann!).

    Would you mind telling me where I could find the acrostic that you said was done like this? I would love to read it.

    Thanks again,

    Lilac Moon

  • M.A.King
    September 18, 2004
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    i was taken with this poem before i noticed that it was an acrostic and then i was even more taken with it. the meter/rhythm is especially appealing to me. i love rhyme and you have really done an excellent job with your phrasing. to make an acrostic with rhyme and meter that flow so well is amazing. i have only seen one other acrostic done like this with all the other elements. the content is lovely and i really enjoyed this poem.


  • S A Adelmann
    September 4, 2004
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    Your acrostic has rhyme! Nice work, Lilac. I had to come see it after you mentioned it to me. The rhyme adds another level of challenge.

    Scott

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