The light slowly fades to darkness
Yet another sun has set
And with it goes my heart
For the glow filled it with life
The radiance my mind with wonder
And as this all dies away
I can no longer function
The darkness is too bold
Taking control of my mind
Changing each emotion
I had carefully planned out
To it's own dismal thought
This black cares not for others
Only it's own intentions
Ones that were built in the memory
Of the light fading away
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Written August 28th, 2004
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This could become a quatrain in form with som minor variations, however it is a good free write
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On every horizion is a new day... maybe for some and not for others. Darkness explains so much, yet blots important details out that an outsider cannot bear to take the time to see. People work how "darkness" does here... it's saddening how others function off the hurts of others and could careless; walk away without a glance back. Keep your chin up, there's the good and bad. One cannot have one without the other. Take care of yourself. Always ~star
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nicely written . . but even as we write things like this . . you still realise that tomorrow means another awesome dawn
i hope to see a dawning description of joy somewhere soon
. .. chukles
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8/10
Good stuff, again this poem demonstrates(like a few others I've read tonight) how you can write short poems that don't ramble and really work
I liked this one because it is unhappy without being self possessed
Good Stuff (push)
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