I don't want a Romeo; I want an Icarus.
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Written August 27th, 2004
A contest entry
- one liners (un paquebots) by fall into me.
400 points, ended December 16, 2004, 92 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow! i think this is the the most impressive thing tht i have read on the site! amazing, well deserved trophy ! wish i could think 1/10th well of this one liner
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Hey. A few months ago, you entered a one-liners contest. This is an offical invitation to join my own one-liners contest under the contest title JoinThisContestOrI'llPutAMobHitOnYourWholeFamily. Hope to see you enter!-Curtis Meyer
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This is lush! So much impact for such a short poem. And so damn true. Plus, I think it's funny that the title's longer than the poem. Also have to agree with the title
Very, very cool poem
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I agree. Romeo's are too dramatic with no reason. Icarus' have the actual drama, but don't bitch. That, and I want to fly with someone.
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verrrrryyyy innnnerrresssssing....
they both die; Romeo and Icarus do.
Romeo takes poison rather than live a loveless life
Icarus ignores his father's warning and flies too close
to the sun and crashes into the sea. Both die
Romeo and Icarus made bad choices...had they not been
so selfish and self centered the lessons left behind would
be much different.
The speaker in the poem seems to be saying i don't want a
romantic demise but a death of a dreamer who dared to touch
the unreachable.
Truly an interesting piece and caused me a whole lot of angst
in what to make of it. I enjoyed the enigma. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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This is so utterly bizarre. It's like part of the name of the poem is also part of the name that is part of the poem itself. This is absolutely insanity. I love it!
Abby Eyeball
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Wow!!! Exactly! That's such an amazing analogy. I know exactly what you mean. *applause*
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I <3 you.
God, this is perfect. And hilarious, but in a bitter way... boo, we share the ideal of perfect man.
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*Snorts* Not sure whether you meant this to be humourous and if not, I apologise but this is so.... perfect. It's amusing and consise. I am not, as a general rule, a fan of such short poetry unless it is wry and can, literally, make me snort water through my nostrils in mirth and you have done this. So different in style to your usual, yet it is also so distinctive of the emotive tone you have. How on earth do you do it? *Is impressed.* *And jealous.*
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I agree with markkram. i mean i gues you got your poem across but i dunno -lacer
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Hmmm. Well I was going to just pass this one over, however, you did use your points to put it into the featured box so I must comment. I hate when I put poems up there and people don’t comment, I would rather they tell me they hate my guts, rather than leave nothing. anyway Im rambling here, this poem is pretty short I would say, I love short poetry, but this may be a little to short for my liking, either way, I suppose you got across what you wanted to. so good job "I think" ...kram...
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