... for Bonnie ...
Gentle fingers scan my spine; tender thoughts revolve in mist;
Loving glances read my mind; passions, deep, evolve in mist.
Gleaming in the full moon’s glow, hedged inside a silver rim,
Dancing on the high wind’s flow, passing clouds involve in mist.
Vapors lift with morning light; golden ripples sheen the lake;
Warmth replaces failing night; memories dissolve in mist.
Cast upon a spanning haze, rainbow halos ring the sun;
Grasses ripple in the breeze; shifting winds resolve in mist.
Gaze with me upon this art, endless fading from our sight;
How can souls be split apart when the two convolve in mist?
Since Zahhar has known your touch, sounds and colors merge and fade;
Countless trembling dreams, fulfilled, each and all devolve in mist.
Author notes
featured in:
Muse Apprentice Guild: www.muse-apprentice-guild.com/ (Fall 2003 issue)
to learn more about the ghazal: allpoetry.com/Column/784848/all=1
Written May 12th, 2003
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A contest entry
- What is real Love? by Lily of The Valleys.
300 points, ended December 3, 2004, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Bravo bravo Erin, this is for your girl I suppose..Im sure she loves to get a poem from her handsome man
very beautiful, but did it fall into any of the catagorys, I'll have to check because quite a few people are doing just this. stay in touch, i'll comment your poems, if you comment mine.
that's a promise, not an offering
-H.Trueblues -
Beautiful poem and form, Erin! Wonderfully artful use of words and lovely imagery creating a misty, wistful mood.
~ G
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wow. this is an amazing write. i really liked the form used (i was unfamiliar with it) but it just worked so very well. incredible imagery in this piece, every word was gorgeous. beautifully done. thank you SO much for entering, and best of luck in the contest <33
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This is beautiful! I can only imagine being there - great imagery. I like the reptition of the word "mist" - very effective. As always, wonderful write
~Elsie -
Breathtakingly beautiful
This is an absolutely gorgeous write. The images draw themselves in your words. It begins so romantic and warm and ends with a sort of wistfulness. I don't know if I'm reading it correctly or not. I sense a sadness about it.
I must say I love your style. You really have this form down pat. Keep writing and never stop.
Absinthe
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Passion, love and admiration I read in this poem
That special touch that touches not only the body but the soul too, is so fantastic! You've described it very well in this poem!
Hugs,
Mari
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sublime
Now this...is what I am hoping to be able to accomplish with my own writing. The metrics, flow, and imagery are completely unimpeded throughout and each couplet is completely independant of the others.
One can feel the thrill Zahhar feels at "Bonnie's" touch by reading this one...objective accomplished, I'd say.
Regards,
Del
Edited on Aug 25, 9:48 because ''.
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