once a year all the disney characters meet
at the annual pinic
it is held at universal studios.
the ugly sisters are thrilled by their invitation
(they were banned from balls)
they each turn up with a poodle.
then arrives a bus load of happy couples
there must have been 1000 prince charmings
all with their flourishing brides
then came dumbo and his mummy
who had an entire acre of land to themselves
they played all day
then came the end of this joyous occasion
the joylity ended
and all the characters dissolved into their tapes
all of them wondering what next year would be like!
Author notes
Written August 24th, 2004
A contest entry
- Disney Contest - For Ages 12 and Under Only by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended September 6, 2004, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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wow this is kwl nice write and good ideas aswell. I liked the imaganasion put in to it. made me smile, good work..
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Congradulations on your trophy!!!
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very nice write. it shows your imagination and creativity.
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Congrats! Very light-hearted and happy indeed, and definitely deserved the trophy from what I can see. Good job!
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wow! Your first trohpy? Well done!
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Wonderful poem here! im so glad youve came 2nd!! Well done! Im really happy for you!
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this was pretty nice it was very cute thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you
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she has the right of her own opinion, BUT, I do think that it would be better if she would explain why she doesn't like it.
Just because natural thing is twelfe, that doesn't mean you should walk on you toes, because you don't want to hurt her feelings, she is twelfde not a retard!
I like the story of this poem, but I miss something, I do think that there should be some ryming in this poem.. That my opinion...
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poetbabe2004 - this is another example of when you should refrain from commenting! These are younger poets and they deserve a little respect. That comment is not a critique and it is just plain mean and rude. Not nice dear, not nice nor diplomatic at all. Again, act your age and remember the ages of these poets. Grrrr!
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I don't think you should say that, I mean I know the 1st amendment, but that might affect naturalthing's feelings, so I wouldn't recomment saying that
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good
Very good write. Keep up the good work!
God is blessing you!
Dawn
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this was just great brought back memories from my youth of all the great disney movies, this brought a soft smile to me and it lifted the spirit great write
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i didn't like this need to correct alot of things sorry
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thanks purple rose i really like you will you be my friend!i'm sure yuor poem is better than mine
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Great
Great piece, I really like this, you have a fantastic imagination! Too bad I have a contest in here and well, because you will probably beat me out! Great poem, wonderful job naturalthing!
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Purplerose
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thank you everyone who has commented!
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ahhhh lovely write! Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed reading this. Your writing is astounding for someone your age!
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Is this true? A great poem, I liked the description of all the characters and I think it's good that they go back into their tapes because you're discussing characters from the Disney films, not the ones from the fairy tales although lots of them are the same. I'm sorry to hear about your dad and also about you being bullied Keep up the good work, good luck in the contest and good luck in life, I hope things improve soon
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Okay, Okay, she didn't steal the idea. I don't think she's even READ that poem, let alone stolen the idea. Hehehehe. I'm a mean big sister
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Very unique and well done. A gem of a tale. I always wondered if they ever had reunion parties hehehe. Great piece! Thanks for sharing your talent and imagination with us and best of luck in the contest to you.
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It's quite a charming poem. I hope you didn't steal though, that's naughty.
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great job
I like this idea, though julia claims you stole if it from her but....i really like your use of vocab...though i'm not sure if i like the fact that they go back into their tapes, cause they're story book characters...well the disney characters you've mentioned? But all the same, i think you've done a great job, good luck in the contest!
Kirsty
ps keep it up, and your name was an honest typo okay, its fixed..i think!
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you have quite the vocab for someone your age...keep up the good work.
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MEANY! You got that idea from my Disney beauty contest!!!! You copier!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Amusing though
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