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Watching Your Ex-lover & One-Night Stand Fall in Love (Shakespearean Sonnet)

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by Gregg Rowe

I dream we stroll upon the white sea sands
Where mother moon – she sends her stars to kiss
Upon our cheeks as we entangle hands
Before I awake – see the chance I missed

I watch in silent rage – the kiss he steals
Under this moonlight where I should have stood
But friendships’ important -  I opt the deal
He’s kissing my ex-lover – think that’s good?

His lips they connect below twinkling lights
Their shadows embrace – silhouettes the sky
My ex-boyfriend and one-night stand unite
The time has come now, I must stand aside

I watch them moonlight kiss and holding hands
I think I walk away the better man



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  • Blooming Poet
    March 5, 2008

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    Option number in author notes please. Otherwise I love it. Great poem. I like how unlike most cheating poems, you can be mature about the sitaution and not bitch and have an ager fit about it.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 6, 2007
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    Oh my, this hit me hard. Phenomenal piece! Best of luck in the contest.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    December 22, 2006
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    FANTASTIC!


  • N-c-g-a
    December 8, 2006

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    I like this, alot. Things like that do happen in the real life world, and most of the time people do become bitter, and they end up losing more than they would have. If this did happen to you I am terribly sorry, it is such a horrible thing to have happen, but I am glad that you held onto yourself and noticed it for what it was and found yourself to be the better man, it is such a great acomplishment. I congradulate on this, and your decision in it. Good job and good luck.


  • intanglio2ring
    March 23, 2006
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    Thanks for the free hug, and for sharing your poetry. You've taken a gentlemanly position of standing aside and that's very honorable. It must have been a sight! Good Luck in the competition.


  • poet2angels gold member
    March 2, 2006
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    What a emotion filled poem....You expressed so well the feeling of the green eyed monster and your poem is beautifully written!...Good luck!.....Lynda


  • ThisIsMyWonderland
    January 30, 2006
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    90/100 in my contest


  • slender spider
    September 22, 2005
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    Congratulations on the bronze, I thought this was a superb entry and am glad to see it recognised!


  • slender spider
    September 14, 2005
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    An excellent transformation of heart ache to art!
    Great sonnet.


  • NotColdHearted
    May 31, 2005
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    pretty good

    You had good imagery in this one. I could picture everything well. I didn't get as connected with this one though it was still good. I didn't get the emotion out of it. If that makes any since . Nicely written and good luck.
    Chealsy


  • everybodys-fool
    May 6, 2005
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    Hey. Awesome poem, it really is. You have such a way with words, your a true poet. I can feel all of your emotions, the love, regret, jealousy and most of all pain. Trust me, ive been in that situation and i know it sucks. Majorly sucks. Anyway, great poe. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.

    Emma xxx

  • Only To This Paper
    March 9, 2005
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    Wow i cant even tell you how much I love that!!! You are very talented!!!!
    Lost in life,
    xshadowxgirlx


  • cookiemonster
    January 17, 2005
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    this was amazing, i can understand the arguement for and against options, but the intention of which way the poem is focusing on is there and yeah, well that was definately breathe taking, well dont and thankyou very much for enetring my contyest. god luck

  • Hate2Love
    December 17, 2004
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    umm you did write which poems you commented on in your comment box...and also you didn't write if you would forgive your friend for taking over...


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    December 15, 2004
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    This is a beautifully painful write and I can sense the pain and jealousy in the words that you have written. I think that to have written this in the sonnet form as you have, that you are extremely talented. Well done


  • Andu
    September 19, 2004
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    dude, this oozes with emotion, and is really sad. But I like the way you ended it. Sometimes walking away the better man is harder than anything else. But I guess that is the secret to life, accpeting the things and the people you cannot change and moving on. This is a great write, very well penned. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Neon Highway
    September 19, 2004
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    waaaa. This was so sad. It was very emotional. Was it a real experience? Thanks for putting the quote I mean this poem was just so, so breathtaking. The way you captured the emotion and wrote it so well. It ended just so brilliantly. Wrapped me in from start to finish


  • MysticTears
    September 15, 2004
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    You such have a beautiful way with words..... Reading this, I could see it in my mind, the beauty of the moonlight bathing everything... Then the shock of seeing them together.. and the overwhelming hurt...And the hardship yet strength of walking away.. Fantastic Sonnet.. I admire your writting very much.. Thank you for entering and Good luck
    Jasmine
    [MysticTears]


  • M.A.King
    September 9, 2004
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    god, i love a good sonnet! there is something so passion- inspiring about this form. another wonderful work here. the subject is sad and at my age i have seen a few of these moments in life. a sting that lasts a good bit. your couplet is just perfect to sum up the pain, but the determination also with that last line. excellent sonnet.


  • hugh wyles silver member
    August 25, 2004
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    Hi Gregg,
    Getting better all the time! Only three lines with shaky meter in this one. Don't forget my offer if you want.
    Regards, Hugh.


  • angelica silver member
    August 24, 2004
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    Gregg, by walking away you are the better man, never doubt it, for one day when you are well again, there will be someone just for you, very beautiful Sonnet~Love~Joan~


  • Vampress
    August 24, 2004
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    Gregg,
    I swear it seems when I read your words that you've entered my soul and said the things I can not say. However, I know that isn't so, this is most likely about you. All I can say is that I remember those nights, watching my first girlfriend leave me for another woman, and seeing them hand in hand everywhere I went. It hurt seeing it happen, but as long as she was happy that was all that mattered to me. It does make you the bigger person to be able to do that, rather then become furious with rage and try to do something about it as others do.

    The background you've picked is beautiful. It also goes along with the peice, a love burned, and a new one kindled. Kind of reminded me of the song "Burn" from Usher. He talks about how he left this girl, and even though he knows it was better for them to be apart, it still hurts him to see her with another man. He keeps saying he has to let her burn out of his mind, and just be a memory.

    You have a wonderful way with words, and with every work of yours I read, I become more entranced with them. Very beautiful, no matter how sad. Excelent job, Gregg!
    Michelle


  • Dean
    August 24, 2004
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    Tis meaningfull, Tis. These sonnets do good for you. I know they probally don't sound good to you, but hey, we are our harshest critic.....
    I feel programmed somehow, now.
    Anywho, I like this because its simplicity wasn't overdone, ya know? It was enjoyable to read, but didn't play to the reader.

  • listen
    August 24, 2004
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    yes, a perfect sonnet indeed!and a meaningful message too.you ARE the better man from that.and as long as you hold that attitude,you will forever be.

    you are very skillful at structured and rhyming poetry.


  • cherche -d -ame
    August 24, 2004
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    Yes , the one that walks away silently without rage , only a heart that is about to shatter into a thousand pieces is always the better man/woman. I love deeply , but would never beg or plead if there would be someone else that had conquered over me...why fight for something that you have obviously lost. It will only make you bitter .......

    Reenie


  • candy177
    August 24, 2004
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    Damn Gregg - I hope this didn't really happen to you. What a lousy thing to have happened, but you managed to write about it beautifully and still walk away the better man. Kudos to you hon!

  • lachicamontanas
    August 24, 2004
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    Beautiful imagry... however, I think that the last two lines of the second stanza could use a little bit of help. it seems as if you may have had trouble here and forced the rhyme. Just my opinion.
    I loved the first stanza, it's beautiful.


  • duana
    August 24, 2004
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    Your sonnets just choke me up, and bring out my deepest feelings.

  • beetle
    August 24, 2004
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    ooh i can feel the agony, maybe it's cuz i can kind of relate on some level to this poem...i love the structure and the first stanza especially. nifty work ^.^ cheers


  • Touchof1der silver member
    August 24, 2004
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    Beautifully written! If this is a mirrored image of a real life situation, I am in awe of the way you were able to not only pen this, but to feel as if you walked away a better man. That says a lot for good character. Great job!


  • astralshepherd gold member
    August 24, 2004
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    There’s lots and lots in here…besides the imagery (which is wonderful) There are feelings. Feelings like insecurity, anxiety arise as i read this, trying to read beyond the “usual suspects”. After lingering here, I wonder is this a dream, as one experiences while sleeping (??), and the waking makes me feel the uneasiness or is the “dream” a universal longing, that one says aloud…as one would say “i wish for such and such”. For me, it is not one or the other but both. The phrase “before i wake” could be the awakening from slumber or the waking that comes as if one is realizing something. Both views, the dream and the wish – both held in tension; .separately and together. The beginning lines of the stanzas….”I dream” and “I watch” allow me the privileged to pass between the two realms easily. Lovely “I” statements of purpose and of intention mixed with passive ones of observation. Great job…held my attention here for over an hour. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard

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