A little field mouse scurried across the bare floor,
as the house cat chased him he slid under the door.
Now Marcus the field mouse had gone into a room,
it was decorated with streamers and colorful balloons.
He looked in amazement at what caught his eye,
a little white mouse went scurrying right by.
Marcus thought, she looks cute with her pink bow,
who is that little mouse, Marcus wanted to know.
He chased after her back out under the door,
luckily he did not see the mean cat anymore.
He finally found her hidden under a small open book,
when she heard Marcus coming she peeked out to look.
She smiled at Marcus his heart was all a flutter,
as he tried to speak he then began to stutter.
The little white mouse said, hello my name is Paige,
I have just escaped from a little wire cage.
She said, the owners have a son who lives in the house,
for his birthday the boy wanted a little white mouse.
She said he was mean, he poked and teased me all day,
when he opened the door to feed me I quickly ran away discombobulated
At that very moment they heard a strange kind of sound,
their hearts started pounding as they both turned around.
The mean house cat had found them, they must get away,
Marcus said to Paige, follow me, I know a secret way.
Together they went under the door and out a tiny crack,
they ran across the meadow and never once looked back.
Now Marcus and Paige live in a crate with their family,
they gives thanks each day , being happy and being free.
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Written August 24th, 2004
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again this was a great story. I like that it had a happy ending. I was smiling through the whole thing. You should send this poem out to be published too! I liekd this so much! I hope some day I see your poems as childrens books! They would seel like hotcakes!
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Thank you so much for the lovely comment. It is so appreciated. Take care. Sandy
Great contest.
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Such a cute poem ...love conquers all, even in mousedom
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck
Dee
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Thank you for the nice comment. I tried to rework that one line. I have so much to learn. This was only my third attempt at a children's poem, I wrote the first two, The Ugly Fairy and The Magic Wand a couple of days ago. I really enjoyed writing about childrens fantasy. Take care and thanks so much
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This was pretty cute, especially for little children. Also a little bit of educational value to it; my niece could learn from this... she has a hamster and all she wants to do is pick it up 24 hours a day. I'm sure the hamster would like to have some peace and quiet every once in a while. Anyways, one technical thing I noticed was in line 14 you used the word "then" twice. Perhaps you could try to find a better way to word that line instead of using syllable-fillers. I think your poetic calling is definitely in children's work. Cute.
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Yea I don't mind my spelling either or is that ither. Just kIdding :00 I kind of enjoy writing these kids poems. Thank you for the conmment Bowie.I appreciate it Bowie Take care. Sandy
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this is a really sweat poem sandy! really good! I don't think there is anything in this poem that you should change, (of course ignoring spelling cause I really can't tell if there are mistakes of that kind) Thsi was awsome, and I loved reading it. you should enter it in a contest!
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A funny and cute poem, I liked it a lot This was well-written with a good narrative, thanks for commenting on my poetry
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Thanks for the nice comment. I appreciate it. I'm glad to see someone else on here over fifty. I only know two others. I feel like Grandma moses on here babysitting all these youngsters. I love them though. Take care, Sandy I'll check out some of your poems later
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This was a bit of a comical poem. I too was picturing the cartoon charcters of Tom and Jerry. I like this a lot. It gave me a belly laugh for the morning.
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lol, this was such a cute poem! I watch Tom & Jerry all the time and this reminded me of a few episodes I've seen. I loved the way you put this story together. Well, good job.
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