she's a mean girl through and through
my Dixie
she likes to cat call when I'm standing near
but never to me,
she likes those redneck men, with big cocks and small brains
she says they're better in bed, and don't need all the foreplay
walking hardons, she whispers easily
her nails spider crawl against my palms
she tickles when she doesn't know any better
and i don't think she realizes the ideas she's conscripted me into thinking
she is not so clever as much as wicked, but she's beautiful
50 miles of long leg, and heart shaped ass
but warped, and knows when and which buttons to push
but Dixie's my Dixie, even if she can't see it yet
she's got stars in her eyes that Dixie,
but with her legs so far back she can't see em
while Tim pegs her to the back of her chair
she whistles, a song-less tune that floats on the air
like banjos and harmonicas
and i can't deal with this while she lays there
wide eyed to the world, and to Tim,
who fucks her with his jeans around his hairy ankles
fucking pig of a human, grunting while i watch on
sometimes i wonder why i do it, why i don't just close my eyes
walk away
but Dixie's my Dixie, even if she can't see it yet
and i can't just walk away.
Nyx...
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this must be what it's like to go insane.
Written August 24th, 2004
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Wow...I really like this...took me to another place...really made me want to keep reading...I WANT MORE!!
Seriously...this was great...brilliant...definately not erotica...who said it was?
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I like it. I don't have a profound way of saying it or a certain piece of it I like in particular. I like the feel of it, the uneasiness, the slight nausea, the attachment. Good job.
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ahahaha yah 2003 was a pretty shitty year for me in general
Yah feel free to use Dixie, everyone does
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oh yeah. the point of all this...so i can use this one, right?
(i skipped a bunch of your work because i got halfway through 2003 and wasn't really impressed so i skipped ahead. you were right. you're on to something with these Dixies of yours.) -
hah yah, the erotica comment bugged me, if it was porno, you'd know. im not very subtle with sex writes.
some people are just stupid.
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yeah. i understand. i rarely reread mine as well. pssshhh...erotica. this isn't erotica. this is class A.
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as for lines, pretty much, each line is a line unto itself, the only time i use punctuation really is in the line itself.
shrugs im lazy.
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yes, yes it is.
i told you i dont re-read them often.
and when i do i miss things like that!
Thanks
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this is DEFINITELY one i'd like to consider using. the only thing that's bugging me is i can't tell where a line ends for the life of me in some spots. i think some more punctuation, like periods and commas would help.
"but with her legs so far back she can't seem em"
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well a little bit of JackD goes a long way forsure.. even when I smell burning rubber hehehh inside joke with JD.. hehhehe
Good write Mizz Nyx.. had me quite spellbound.. vicious yet not too scary.. your Dixie is quite a lass
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this beats erotica.
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It's not even close to being erotica.
Try again.
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Well, seeing as how it's NOT erotica, of course you'd think it's weak.
If it were erotica, i'd have put it in that category.
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i love this poem/story...it's a weak example of erotica though..but still a nice piece of lit.
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Well, i'm not one for erotics, but you poem did't sound so bad.. it was really well written and i agree with smiley keep that up OK?
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You have made Dixie to be an unique person.
Yvonne
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I like the Dixie series and want to read more. I think this is my fave, might be because of Tim. Might be because you were watching. Well the hell done.
Desiree
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im definately not a guy.
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sounds like a couple of women i know... and i've watched my guy-friends go through what you describe. although, maybe not in such a raw manner.
i like it. because it's raw. -
hey I once knew a girl like that, but she in now in isolation
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I bet, are you insane, have you reached that level of sanity and insanity, for it is a thin line you walk, stay strong my dear i like your dixie poem it was sexy very i like it
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Dixie's a figment of my imagination so Yah, i love her.
She's based on someone, sorta, though, Dixie's more whorish!
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Unique
Dixie must be a girl who knows what she wants and how to get it..she must have her own weird style but she's funny in a way.. well, if somebody can whisper a walking hardon it will really get me into smiling...
But you really do love that Dixie.... -
Some more Dixie. I still don't like that you say she isn't clever, but that's just me being difficult. I like her though, she seems like such a strange woman, a lot more complex I think than she would want people to think. I don't much care for her whoring, but at the same time it is all part of her charm and cruelty to the one who wishes to have her as their mistress. She is clever in my book.
Love this bg, btw.
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