The kids, they are a-stammering
and whine to reach the town,
the trip - way too enamoring
for faces without sound.
And so, uncap the pickle jar
to make this ride a thrill;
keep it silent, town's too far
and Mama's at the wheel.
Now once they get the bottle popped,
they’ll spill it on the seat
laughing like today has stopped
while pickling their feet!
Author notes
I remember vacationing like this.Did you ever get there?? What'd you do while it took so long? We just HAD to get into trouble
Written June 20th, 2002
A contest entry
- Enhancing Reading and Reading Awareness (A Readership Program) by Hashnah Sheviatte.
700 points, ended May 16, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Very nice,. I love the rhymes and the use of words,. Thanks for your entry,. God bless!!!!
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"Are we there yet" I can remember those words coming from my boys when they were young. But oh what wonderful memories that you have made and are still making. What a wonderful write. I have enjoyed reading and commenting on your writes today. Have a wonderful and blessed day
You have just been Hood-Winked by a member of the Poetic Bandits
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'I can see the sea!!'
Funny poem...made me laugh! Car trips with kids are a nightmare aren't they!? When I was little, I apparently threw up seven times on the way to the safari park! (I'm sure it's all lies!)
Great poem,
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fortunatley for us I don't think my parents ever took us road trips like this... or if they had was too young to remember.
Cute write -
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LOL... a gr8 write cookie :o) ahhh the joys of travelling with kids... dont u just love it? not LOL
hugs
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So you ate pickles with your feet Cookie? Man that is a tallent cute write:O) Hugs,Sherry -
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Delightful first read of your work Kookie :) playful, and joyful...great rhyme. -Darmok -
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Are we there yet???? Are we almost there?? Are we??
My dad seemed to have really long arms back then...
Cheers for this lovely stroll back in time. Beautifully done, cookie :) xx -
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lol...good one...very cute indeed, I love the humor. :)
~Gayla~ -
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This was very cute! he-he! -
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Hehehehe this is great, made me laugh at memories of my own!
Kaz -
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i remember days like this only i dont eat pickles. yuk. but yeah this was a good poem. -
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very sweet
cute read
well done
~*~adriana~*~ -
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Cute. Gave everyone a nice smile. -
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LOL loved this... i used to use my hairdryer as a gun.. pointed it to all the cars and would shoot them dead.. dunno why lol but im sure i had a really good reason then!! lol -
Your extra comments made me laugh! Thank you...Yep. We need a lighter side in here and everywhere, don't we?? >>>>>>>>>> You folks are great!!
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I smell pickle juice... -
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lol this is cute..
are we there yet?
I'm HUNNNNGRY..
I hafta peeeeeeeeee
Mooooom ,he's touching meeeeee
'DON'T MAKE ME STOP THIS CAR!'
lol..sorry -
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aaaaawwww...i remember the good ol' times...tear...how i wish to be young again.....wait what am i talking about...i am young silly me...great write and very cute... :-P
~Sofrito~ -
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we used to make signs and put them in the window.
'i'm being kidnapped'
'you're a retard'
all sort of silly things
we liked to hang things out the windows, too.
shoelaces made great 'kite-ties'. -
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This is wonderful! I miss being a little kid. -
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it's been said before, but: cute! -
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LOVE IT!!!!!!!
we need something like this: cute & funny -
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cute :) -
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LOL... Very cute and entertaining piece, really enjoyed this :-)
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