Everything’s here,
There’s nothing to fear,
The sky’s clear blue today,
All I’m thinking of is you today,
Don’t worry about tomorrow,
I’ll still be by your side tomorrow,
Yesterdays gone,
Today is a new day,
Let the sun shine bright upon us,
And we will have nothing to fear.
Author notes
i have no idea what i was trying to get at lol,heres the result lol and i know its far from my best
Written August 23rd, 2004
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Ah!!!! I like the idea and you wrote beautifully, however it drives me nuts to see repeated words at the end of a line. Call it a pet peeve. Even though I have been known to do it from time to time for drastic effect.
Besides that, what a wonderful poem and you appear to have mastered the short form. You may want to consider a structured short form like Haiku, Senru, Limrick or something... I think that you would be very good at them. -
hmmmm...... very unique!!! i liked it all but i'm not a happy kind of person so it doesnt really relate to me but it was still off the hook.... i like more rhyme but i guess sum ppl are different...hehe...... it was still tight tho... great write
Later,Linzui
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