Made and born in
such special love
Togetherness and
arms so open
We created and
delivered
Such innocent beauty
To a world so safe, with our protection
As pure as the angel so white
Hard to imagine a creation
so wonderful and complete
We did......We gave
their fight for survival
their soul for life's emotions
their limbs to give and support
their senses for the experience
their head for the challenges
their beauty to enjoy and share
Also...
their heart for love....
But...
Not so soon for hurt!!
How did we turn
The white to black?
Why bring such innocence into this world?
Then break the bubble of protection, so soon
How could we be so selfish?
We may still show the love
But how to accept the loss of togetherness?
So hard to instill the trust
So easy to let them down
So harsh almost evil
To give it all then take it back
Did you think of the children?
Author notes
Feel free to suggest change as i'm not sure if i'm totaly satisfied with this.
Written August 22nd, 2004
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Wow! I like this very much it is very poignant and the way you worded it, the images were very nice. It is very interesting and something I've never seen anyone write about before, thank you for sharing I think it is very good. Keep going!
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I always feel so sad for the children involved, when people I know split up. I have tried in vain, in the past, to try and talk both my sister and two close friends into reconsidering leaving their husbands, for the sake of their kids. I know it's not always that easy and they all had their reasons, but I put to them the very questions you ask here in this poem. Sadly, in these cases, my pleas made no difference.
One of my favourite authors is Rob Parsons. He writes books on various aspects of family life and this is a quote from an article I read about him, only yesterday...
“People find it difficult to be as committed as they need to be, especially where children are involved. `In previous generations people would say, "We'll stay together for the sake of the kids." You tend not to hear that now--though I think it's still a very good reason.' Rob has seen `countless' marriages where the partners have done that and `in that process of loving as an act of the will' have found emotional love again.
What of the argument that it is better for children if their parents divorce rather than row constantly?
Rob maintains that kids generally do better in a home with conflict than they do after their parents separate. `And of course the idea that divorce ends conflict is a nonsense. Most kids still see their parents involved in conflict over access or maintenance. The idea that life becomes all sweet for kids after divorce is a massive illusion.'”
It’s a shame that more people don’t appreciate that committed love sometimes has to be “ an act of the will”
I hope you didn’t mind me quoting all that stuff here… it was just fresh in my mind from yesterday and seemed so appropriate to the issue in your poem.
This is a touching and heartfelt piece. Your children are lucky to have you, you sound like a great mum!
~ Louise
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Thank you for your comment, your right on the concept - funnily enough i wrote that particular line a couple of times. settled with that as it's suggesting the children had security of two people toghether with open arms - i'll have to look at it again now..lol. thank you. Lx
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this is a really great write, the only thing that I think needs to change is....
Togetherness and
arms so open
I think togetherness doesnt go with arms so open... like a bit of an opposite too early...
maybe.......... togetherness personified
or interlinked... togetherness
maybe i get the whole jist wrong if i do i apologise
anyhows a great write, thinking you are wrting about splitting up??
take care
Lisa xx -
omg i love this poem! I like the way write, exspecially the style of writing in this poem! Keep up the good work and i expect to hear from you later. Stop by and comment on some of my poems. Good write again!
~Lyndsey~!~
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