Bird overhead
poop on your head
wishing it dead
Author notes
Purple Onions
Written August 21st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- The Unusual Theme For Haiku Contest by NoWayJo.
600 points, ended August 22, 2007, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Hehe. I used to feed the seaguls. Then one pooped on me...
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A little birdie told me this is a true-event haiku, and it may even have to do with those two soccer-player kids in the picture!
Thanks for this fun haiku-entry to the contest, Duana!
Jo
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LMAO.. holy crappppp i thought i was the only freak that wrote poop poems.. lol.. you should read my poems... a haiku jenns issue.. um i think like 2 or 3 of my poems have poop in them.. lol.. good job!!
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lol this is hilarious.. Good job
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Thats it?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!!?omg try again!
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Bird poo in a haiku? i guess its got an element of nature which is supposed to be part of haikus, very good
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Lol, very funny. I figured this should be the first one I comment on. The title interested me. Well, haiku isn't supposed to rhyme but I'll overlook. It usually isn't supposed to be about anything funny either
. But the contest called for that so who cares? Very, very funny though. Poor kids, wonder which one got the crap on head? Well done! Keep it up!
~CT -
Hip Haiku!
Do you know the worst part about this haiku/ I am in the contest against it! I am sooo gonna lose! Very nice write! -
Lmao this is just...Too familiar
Haha..It made me laugh. It's very well written...Thanks for the smile Great job! Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. Thanks also for following the rules.
Take care
~Lana
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This is funny (gross) but funny! Good job and good luck! Penny
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I realize that, but I purposively did it to add to the humor of this. Also, just so you know...I learned haiku under haikumonk, where the number of syllables have no significance.
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This lovely haiku has the 4-4-4 format of syllables which gives it a total of 12 syllables. The visual imagery of this was excellent. There is so much of humour hidden in this haiku. The topic you have written about is a very simple one; yet you have put it across beautifully. My family believes that if bird poop falls on your head, it brings you goodluck! One important thing about haiku is that the lines should not rhyme.
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good
I love it and your poem made me laugh, Thanks, I needed that!
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Thank you for reading my poem What would an Angel Do? I value your opinion.
God is blessing you
Dawn -
the haiku isn't suppose to rhyme...lol! But I'll overlook it this one time as it is hilarious.
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That's hilarious! I love humorous things so when I saw this I just had to read it!!!
Kayla
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Well - see, I think this is funny. Scatological humor is just never out of fashion! Of course, it is funny when it happens to someone else - when it happens to me, it just sucks.
Scott
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lol somone was in a silly mood I think this was funny only cause we all know how pesty the poopy turdy birdy's can be this may be short but it sure does show the frustraition one might feel if a damn bird pooped on them nice write
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lol i really liked it its so simple but because of that its all the more funny. Write more about it cuz lol I think sum people can relate. Neways, props to you.
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Great poem! i havent read much haiku but i liked that.
Good luck in the contest.
--You have just been Dented--
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FantabulousHaiku!!!
Never been pooped on,
Infact I always pay attention,
To birds flying over head,
It's a good sign,
Of course,
If it poops on ya,
Well,
Then it's time,
To think about,
Some things...
Godd Luck in the contest...
God Bless...
Bugs & Fishes
's & 
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's & Wishes
RollyPollies & Me!
~Glet
rica/C. L. Brandon K.~
AngelSnot... -
Some people say that a bird poop brings luck when it falls on our head...I rather go search for a clover
This was an amusing ku Duana!
Good luck in everything you do!
Mari
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lol...so fits my sister...she is a poop magnet.Great write blessed be
~~Serenity~~
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Too cute
But its the pits when they fly over and sh*t on your arm
LOL
Good luck in the contest
Susan~~~ -
This was a very humorous!! Great job and good luck!
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lmfao
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hahaha "wish it were dead." hahahaha That's funny. a relief from all the Sad/miserable and love poems i read today. good job! =]
-CD -
Hey, Michael, you should take haikumonk's class...or read up on modern book on haiku....syllables are irrelevant. I am glad you enjoyed this!!!
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MidlifePoet, your comment was priceless because in turn it made me remember this picnic we had on the beach where poop was falling in our food. Yup, better it fall on your head than in your food! lol
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Funny
Yeah. Now write one about how they always find your newly washed car out of the sea of dirty ones in the Walmart parking lot. Very clever and lots of fun.
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Funny
Pretty funny - but there's 4 syllables in the top line :-(
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Darn title. I couldn't resist but to click on this... I had to know what you were talking about. As it is, this has happened to me before and felt nasty. Thanks for a trip back to fourth grade Cool stuff, keep it up.
Johnny D -
Great Haiku! Short, simple, to-the-point, but very humourus nonetheless- it made me laugh. Good luck in the contest!
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This is fantastic...it brought back memories of a little ditty my grandmother taught me when I was 5...maybe some other time...LOL. Anyway..great job with this! I'm smilin' and remembering the seagulls at the beach! MLP...S
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oh my oh my, if i ever neede a laugh this was so the time, and you jusy got right to that silly girl part of me, that just laughs when someone gets pooped on the head, or even when someone trips.... ya know the silly girl stuff frok school... this still has me titterin... am far too ols to titter......... but it still feels as good.... if not better
i am liki your liddle write
Lisa xxx
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lol...thats funny...it made me giggle...and its allways a nice change from tears...anyways...great job...keep it up! i may have to read some more!!
~Me -
i just think that it flows a little better
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Oh yeah that is weird, you know. I don't think anyone was inspired by anyone else either. It just happened to turn out that way. That IS weird!
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hehehe
liked it
liked it a lot
where are all the poo haiku's coming from?? have i missed something?
elaine -
LMBO!
Ofcourse these toughts are so true, those damn birds over head... They love me I think, and my car too!
Great job, much success in this contest!
-Timothy -
lol very funny, good job
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If you wish to be left alone
Take my advice
Leave no tern unstoned
I liked this simple humour write. Thanks for sharing it.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
lol funny
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Thanks for your comment on my poem!
I really enjoyed this piece; very funny. There was plenty of strong, punchy rhythm/rhyme to keep it snappy, and the subject was well described, right down to the anger (but what can you do? The bird flies off to poop another day ).
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heheheh.. rofl.. very cute.. it's a boy thing ain't it..
Good Ku' liked it
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Boy do I understand this one!... it's like at school when they used to flock around aiming at everyones head or food... this was great..! -
Pretty funny thought! What forces in the weather and coincidence of human activity cause a random bird offering to land just there!
Thanks for featuring!
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This made me laugh! This is great- very lighthearted and funny! Have a great day!
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LOL This is great! So true too! Thankfully for me, no bird has ever pooped on my head. I need to go knock on some wood now....
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Monk. Hi. I think I realize why you gave the comment you did. I know that many people think that 'ing' words are a complete no no in Haiku, but just like the 575 rule- it can be broken. I intentionally used wanting to make the haiku active instead of passive.
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Perfect Poop
Ha ha ha -- Thank God it wasn't Dumbo! Still laughing at this one --
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lol. haha Haiku Momk told us that modern haiku's and senryus are virtually indistinguishable now- so it's great, as you know my LOVE for the senryu!! I'm glad you liked it
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A rhyming senryu... hey, it works!
Reminds me of an old ditty..
A bird flew by
and dropped a message
in my eye
As I wiped it dry
I thanked the Lord
that cows don't fly
~ G
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this is primally good. i like it maybe "wish it was dead" insetad of the line, but it works as is so yeah.
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You know how when you look up, your mouth automatically opens...?
Hope a bird isn't flying over then, HUH?
A very cute write!
cheryl -
lol. . .excellent
a deffinite winner in my book . .lmao
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