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Witnessing A Pandemic (Spenserian Sonnet)

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by Gregg Rowe
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The world had watched away -- while friends did die
A military movement hit the streets;
Their spirits greet cumulus clouds way high
Welfare recipients face power seats.

My nights in vain pass -- drinking whiskey neat,
And counting funerals that come in days --
To stand so composed -- taking summer heat;
My surrogate family dies from AIDS.

Held candle lit vigils -- shadowed with rage --
Shook hands with money --need programs to start
I woke with reason -- enter oral stage
My role in society -- gave my part

I’m alive -- living twenty-two more years;
For long lost friends -- I’ve cried a sea of tears.

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Written August 20th, 2004

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  • gothangel
    May 31, 2005
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    awesome

    wow...this was such an awesome poem...i must have read it like a million times...i really liked it alot...nice job...you are so mega talented...nice job....keep up the good work and when you write another poem, inform me...i love your poetry....nice job...good luck in my contest

  • Nicole Hanna
    September 21, 2004
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    Very powerful and emotional, but not so emotional or personal that the reader can't find ways to relate to it on one level or another. Wonderful. The background adds quite a nice touch to it as well.


  • M.A.King
    September 9, 2004
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    such a difficult form for me but i love it. you have done this beautifully. the content is deeply moving and i feel any of my comments would be weak in comparison to the feelings that this inspires. a remarkable poem.


  • LarryATilander
    August 21, 2004
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    Gregg. It is 'alive' that throws it off. I read that line xx/XX/xX/etc. I live yet, having.... or Alive still, living.... or something like that would fall into better rhythm. Having it work when shifted one position sideways suggests that you may somehow put the emphasis on the 'a' rather than the 'live' which isn't the way anyone I know says it.

  • poets delight
    August 21, 2004
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    wow there was no mistake of me coming here this was brilliant brilliant i have no words


  • lordoftherings gold member
    August 20, 2004
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    I'm not sure about that because my scan in wtriting it appeared like this:

    I’m a/ live -- li/ ving twen/ ty-two/ more years
    x X / x X / x X / x X / x X

    Is there another possibilty?

    Gregg

    Thanks for reading and commenting on it, really appreciate it.

    Edited on Aug 21 because ''.

  • SparklingOutcast
    August 20, 2004
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    another brilliant write...so perfectly rhymed with such amazing flow...you are so talented it makes me wat to just blow my talentless head off..sorry about that...great write..amzing flow especially for a sonnet

  • LarryATilander
    August 20, 2004
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    It is a nice poem with a good message, but it just doesn't scan right for me. Most of it I would just call kind of lumpy, but "I’m alive -- living twenty-two more years;" it just too far off to call iambic at all.


  • SweetSorrow1989
    August 20, 2004
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    ahhhh......... a very well written piece... It is just beautiful and I really enjoyed reading it and I hope other people enjoy reading this poem as much as I have enjoyed reading it... I hope you do more great writing like this... Thanks for sharing this piece with us at allpoetry and good luck in all your writings!


  • duana
    August 20, 2004
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    I tried a spenserian sonnet(Hour Glass), but this is supurb! You iambics are perfect. I am bookmarking it for poetic inspiration. Good job. It is obvious that you thought this through very well!!


  • adios muchachos gold member
    August 20, 2004
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    must read

    A sonnet from the front lines!
    Nicely written and provacative.
    There was a time when ignorance of this illness was even more pandemic than the illness itself. Hopefully this is not the case today.
    Excellent, excellent in every way!
    John-Las Vegas


  • artis
    August 20, 2004
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    we die in many manners and many far too young, victims of the many pleasures and vices, and twists of cruel fate, that cause disease to poison love in it's many varied shapes and disguises. we question the reasoning for siuch sorrow and come up with no answers only cold marble to lay flowers at, and incribed wrods that mark the passing of an old friend gone younger then we ever dreamed, because they simply loved too much, or were embraced by a strange form of death for loving at all....Artis


  • mystiqstranger
    August 20, 2004
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    excellent..i'm very sry for your losses...its aweful to lose loved ones....put your trst in GOD and he will heal your hurt...GOd BLess
    mystiq
    Edited on Aug 20, 11:41 p.m. because ''.


  • ILTL4eva7
    August 20, 2004
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    Wow, this is a great poem... I can feel the emotion from this piece... I can't believe all you've gone through, and I commend you greatly for it. As for the poem itself, your rhyming is good, and you did justice to the form. Great job, keep on writing!!!
    ~Kelsey


  • August 20, 2004
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    Gregg, this is a wonderful sonnet. If only I could write a sonnet... hmm... anyways, lovely write Gregg. You're sonnets are definitely keeping you going in your writings. Keep up the awesome work. Awesome write. Mucho love peace and hugs
    *~Bindy~*

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