We don’t talk like we used to.
Before, words flowed between us,
Laughter was something we shared.
Now I feel like an intrusion,
Like a bad dream,
Haunting your nights,
Or a memory best left forgotten.
Has the fire dimmed so that no spark remains?
When did you close the door to your heart?
Or has mine deafened me to your words?
You used to call me at night
To share your day with me,
Now my phone and I sit alone and quiet in the dark,
Waiting for your voice
To bring it and me to life again.
Once upon a time,
You said ‘you couldn’t stay away from me’,
Now, it seems,
Nothing can make you come near.
Was my heart won too easily for you?
Or were you scared by the depths of my feelings?
Now I feel abandoned,
Discarded,
Like a used paper cup,
Did I miss the part when you said
Goodbye?
Author notes
Hope you like it.
Written August 20th, 2004
A contest entry
- Extra! extra! by pattyann4500.
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wow godd write dear..this poem flows so smoothly..good luck
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Did I miss the part when you said
Goodbye? perfect eding and thats exactly the way it should have ended so just keep on walking... anyways good write and Thank you so much for taking the time to enter and good luck to you in my contest.
huggles
Lena -
Thank you, I did indeed love it! I appreciate your taking the time to write a new piece. Although my need for inspiration forced me to take prewrites, I still have much admiration for poets who take the time and energy to write something fresh.
This is a lovely piece, sad, yet, very appropriate for my needs. I read several moments in your poem that certainly did inspire me, and for that, I am very thankful.
Again, thank you for your wonderful entry. I'm delighted that you decided to enter it. Hugs, Patricia -
It's a wonderful poem with so much meaning: it speaks the mind without the overwhelming feeling of self-pity permeating from the lines.
Good work!! And I hope you do well in the competition ^^ -
this is really good...sry you had to go thru that...
...thanks for entering..good luck and GOd BLess
mystiq
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