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Broken Man




Learning to love
through my mistakes.
Once giving up
because of heartache.

Now looking to live
without any pain.
I am willing to give
in return for the same.

I reach for the sky
touching the stars.
With only one reason why
to have an open heart.

I wait for a lady
to take my hand.
Hopefully to save me
from being a broken man.



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Maybe it's time to tear down my walls.
Written August 20th, 2004

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  • alina
    December 3, 2004
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    Oh this poem is beautifull If you love as well as you write any lady would be lucky to have you thanks for entering blessed be alina


  • qnhoneybee
    September 8, 2004
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    This was a simple poem but with great emotion. I could feel what you were saying and I think it is great to be able to express yourself with very little words. I do hope that you find what you are looking for and find that special lady to take your hand and mend the broken man you obviously feel inside. Love makes us whole. Some like to think they don't need another but we all do and it's great that you can admit to that. Yes, it is a good idea to take down the walls.

  • mindgames101
    August 22, 2004
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    this is a good write. its sounds like you know what your taking about. it has real good flow to it.


  • mystiqstranger
    August 20, 2004
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    this is beautiful...yes do tear down those wals..open up to someone....thanks for entering..good luck and GOd BLess
    mystiq