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Nobody Knows!




The sweet taste of true love...
Oh how it use to make me sing!
I remember no matter where I was,
I lived for her for she was my everything.

Everyday she would make me so happy.
I knew she would always be mine.
I guess there were some things I didn't see
as my love colored my eyes blind.

I did everything right or at least so I thought.
I will never know what went wrong.
She started chasing other guys and got caught.
Leaving my life to inspire sad songs.

It was the hardest thing to do in my life,
to let that sweet true love of mine go.
I thought she would be forever
  my lady, my lover, my wife.
I guess in the end when it comes to true love
  nobdoy knows!




Author notes

Love fades like a setting sun, but it would be nice to see it rise.


Written August 20th, 2004

A contest entry

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  • Rayray
    August 24, 2004
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    Awesome write, I wrote a poem called nobody knows awhile ago, its about something different, but your blew me away, good start. stong body, overall a great poem
    Rayray


  • mystery chick
    August 20, 2004
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    awesome job! omg i loved this poem. i can relate to it in so many ways, except that i felt this way with a guy. wow ur writing style amazes me. i love it. an excellent choice of words. "my love colored my eyes blind" loved that line, its so true. awesome job, keep it up.
    Edited on Aug 21, 9:41 p.m. because 'im an idiot'.


  • stupid blonde
    August 20, 2004
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    well done this had a lot of emotion i expect you are quite upsett about this incident. but well done to be able to write about this. well done
    gtood luck in the copntest

    much love

    XxX† ~*~ANNA~*~ †XxX


  • qnhoneybee
    August 20, 2004
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    This is definnitely the worse feeling in the world. I felt your emotions in every line. It is always so difficult to give up the ones we love but the one we should love the most is ourselves and we need to realize we deserve to be treated like the best. I like the way you remained pretty positive in a negative situation in this poem. Graet job!


  • Oleander
    August 20, 2004
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    so beautifull, yes so sad!

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