I was hoping you would read this;
I need to tell you how I feel.
I don't keep my emotions locked up and
I know what is real.
I saw you slumped in the corner,
I screamed for you to wake.
But you just stared at me
And carried on floating away.
You didn't share,
You didn't see,
You obviously didn't love me.
All you did was cut and watch,
ponder on your misery.
You hoped someone would miss you.
Who said death was free?
Well hear this:
I missed you,
I loved you
And I have paid the price.
But I've let go,
Just like you
Author notes
Wooooaaaaahhhh this about a girl whos dad killed himself and she talkin about how she has paid the price not him. It kinda based on a story I'm gonna write. heehe
Written August 18th, 2004
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A very striking piece. Particularly liked the line:
"Who said death was free?"
And I agree with the point you're making that it is those left behind who ultimately pay the price.
Well done and best wishes, Del. -
really great
Great poem. I really liked it. It had a realness to it that not many poems without personal background have. Awesome write. I love the line,
"You obviously didn't love me."
Kinda stabs at the heart, ya know. Well anyways...great job, keep it up.
Hell Angel -
That was an awsom write!!!!
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Wow, i don't know what to say. this was a breath taking poem well done
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