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Stalker

--------Stalker----------- by sCu}b0mBz

Asleep , awake
Walk down memory lane
Follow You Around

Hold My breath , you might look back
Hide In The uncertainties
Hide in the could have beens
Hide in the might have beens

You didn't look

Run down Memory Lane
Smell your hair walking by
Steal a kiss from astonished lips
Look into those eyes again
Wish I could

Did she look ?

Down memory lane
I dare not go further
the boundary is marked
beyond lies hell
beyond is suffering
right on memory lane

Follow you around the house
The curve of your cheeks
Watching your favourite show
Listening to REM
Doing nothing, like no-one else could
Perfection in disguise
Heaven personified

I didn't look
Did i look ?

Stalker on memory lane
stalker behind you
any moment you may turn back
look back
stop , at least ?

Memory lane ends
Strolled down it for ages past
It ends in another step
Beyond which there is no me , no you
yet still at the last step
I stalk you
You might look
Hide in the should have beens.


Author notes

Blind. So blind.
Written August 18th, 2004

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  • unknownfrailty
    August 18, 2004
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    Perfection in disguise
    Heaven personified

    I LOVED the entire poem but this is the part that just... stuck out to me. Like... that is where I truly lost my jaw and just stared in awe as I went to read the rest of the poem. You truly capture it, and I agree with Jonny... it could be a song, and a great one at that. Keep on writing. Applause for you!

  • princess banana
    August 18, 2004
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    ACE

    EXCELLENT! I really really enjoyed this poem. Its really good.

  • sCuDb0mBz
    August 18, 2004
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    Right , mate. And get bloody famous , get bloody rich , and have thousands of birds following me around ? Mate i can't get over one of them ... what makes you think I could take groupies haha

    Thanx Jonny , you make my day.


  • jonnyfaint
    August 17, 2004
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    very cool

    very nice, i like this one alot, its like an interpol song, every cool, every like hypnotic, i loved the questions it added like individuallity to it, i really think you could make a song like a post punk song, i duno, i like, i think even more than the ecstacy of despair its like trendier, and like more beat