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Self Pity



Will it always be like this,
hurried, no time to talk?
Just, mountains of chores,
dishes to wash, cats to feed.
People, to care for ;
Gardens, to be tended
and relaxed in.
Can the world stop turning, just for a second, so
I can catch my breath?
Gather, my thoughts and regain
my equilibrium, or do I
have to revolve, faster than the speed of light,
just to catch up on myself,
If I pinch myself, will I wake up,
or will I drift on endlessly,
wallowing in self pity;
Dust myself off and paint on
my funny mask, ready to face the world
tomorrow, or perhaps, a sombre
mask would be more fitting for my age;
In a world, where age does matter.
As, when we are twenty, all things are pre- told,
rules, to abide by, thirty and the children
are nearly raised. Never a moment, running
constantly, here there.
forty, celebrates a new life and a new
independence, back to work.
Fifty, the all knowing smiles of a true
being, emerging from the cocoon,
of motherhood ,leaving for a quieter time;
The quirks, of knowing that all one says, is " Allowed"
as age, being the president.
Beyond, is supposed to be a time to reflect,
on one's life, but who knows where one gets the
time.................

not in this life time

 

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A little self Pity.........
Written August 17th, 2004

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 31, 2007

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    I love self pity, because no-one else gives a damn sadly, lol..hell, I'm not sure if I even care anymore..lol.. Thanks for sharing poetess~

    -Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 4, 2005
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    rofl...a washing machine in heat that did make me smile and yes, I was going through a really self pitying time and this just popped up..I can look back on it now and it makes me chuckle as I would really never change a moment of the past, as its the past that makes you what you are

  • Theasp
    May 3, 2005
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    Plaudible and plausible a lovely write

    I think this is your best most thought through work, the rhythm is that of a washing machine in heat, trying to catch the dryer in a good mood, like my TRUE ROMANCE its a sign of the times, painfully so, you use language so beautifully to express ordinary things--motherhood leaving the cocoon, it is safe until they get old enough to eat you alive LOL

  • emajination
    August 22, 2004
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    purely wonderful, excellent rhythme and flow, I never paused and I love a peom that I can read strait through.


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 22, 2004
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    Lol, thanks I shall have to remember that Thanks for the review, it is much appreciated


  • Andu
    August 22, 2004
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    routine sucks doesn't it? especially when you're not enjoying what you do in the first place... i like how you captured this element in this poem, great write!
    and a lil self pity never killed no one

  • pozo
    August 18, 2004
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    An amazing poem which I liked a lot, a great write which was wonderfully written Keep up the good work because this was fantastic

  • cutiepie gold member
    August 18, 2004
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    Thank you for your kind words, they were much appreciated

  • taste my smile
    August 18, 2004
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    women have it terribly hard. not only women, but mothers, wives, lovers. they have to be the most selfless species on earth. you deserve more than a bit of pity. you deserve the gift of freedom.


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 17, 2004
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    Lol.... you know how to bring a smile to the table One tuna and mayo coming up...........

  • cutiepie gold member
    August 17, 2004
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    Thank you Mary for your kind words they were gratefully received


  • August 17, 2004
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    A little self-pity never hurt anyone I think. Let it all out, but please will you feed the cat first, and tend to the garden, and please do not forget to make some dinner for everyone here at Allpoetry. I will have a tuna sandwich please, with a sprinkling of mayonaise. Oh, when you have done that will you darn my socks? I am too busy watching television. Thanks.
    Edited on Aug 17, 7:10 p.m. because 'typing'.


  • Mary Clark
    August 17, 2004
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    this was a really good poem i loved how it spoke of the ture world and not the fake lovly one every trys to portay. I mean it's ture every thing moves so fast you can barley catch up with your self half of the time really. I'll tell you this it really dose get better as time gose on cause you finally some where along the line even if it's for just a min. you do get that dire break you've been longing for so bad. Well great write and read hope to see more soon.
    Luv bunches,
    Mary


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 17, 2004
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    That is a lovely statement " Smell the Roses" Yes I must make the time to do just that Thank you for your kind words


  • SweetSorrow1989
    August 17, 2004
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    Very turn... Sometimes there is no time for yourself and you are too busy to slow down and smell the roses... Great job on this piece! Great Write! I hope you write more great poems like this... I really enjoyed reading it... Great job!


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 17, 2004
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    No not really, it's just the perception that " sucks" This is just me having an off day Thanks for your comments, they were much appreciated


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 17, 2004
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    You know what they say.........Life is what you make it and I am just having a bad day Pass no heed of me , tomorrow will be glorious Age is not important, just your understanding of it Have a great life, and thanks for the very kind comments


  • Soft rayne
    August 17, 2004
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    good

    I like this....and I agree with the point of view (I can relate). Society sucks. good poem!


  • surerbad
    August 17, 2004
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    This is very true in today's society. I have been there up to the 40's part. I am not looking forward to aging much more. It seems I haven't done that much in my life and already it is flying by very fast. I think we all have a little bit of self pity in us. Some shows more than other.
    I like the way you wrote the poem in stages. This was neat. It flowed extremely well together. Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful poem. ( now I now what I to look forward to in later years) LOL
    shelly

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