Past the vampire bite
Where your soul does now wander in the supernatural night
Your life blood leeched out of your lifeless body
Your pure white, mauled carcass, a John Doe, a nobody
And you dreamt of your seduction, in the East
The terrible, mysterious beauty of the female beast
Ample bosoms, ample curves, ample charms
Surely this lady could do you no harm?
And she lifted her cloak, to give you access
Asked you to touch her, asked you to caress
And she kissed you many times, tenderly on the face
Then she invited you over to this darkened, lonely place
You wanted her, you wanted her, desiring her sex
But she had already enchanted you with a witches hex
And your warm, red, blood, fountained out of your jugular vein
You writhed and wriggled but were caught in her vice, tight, death frame
As your blood was gulped into the vampires mouth drain
No pain, just a sexual urge, no pain
And the light got dimmer, in that leafy lane
And now you wander and glide in the cool, eddy's of the night
When the orange, gorged moon is full and the sun is out of sight
Looking for female victims, with animal, nocturnal eyes
Trying to seduce them before the Godly sun does rise
No regard for life as it feeds your eternal, catatonic state
No need for sex, no need to mate, just the desire for blood and hate
No chance for love, just sharp incisors
No chance to see the sun or the light, just the darkness divider
Georges
Author notes
Written August 17th, 2004.
In a list
A contest entry
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300 points, ended September 30, 2006, 16 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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This was wicked awesome. I loved all the blood and the vampiric desire truely described.
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Superb
This is greatly written I enjoyed reading this poem very much. I love talented and meaningful poetry and your poem shines though thank you very much for your lovely beautiful entry and good luck
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Very, very nice. Excellent work, written extremely well. A great beat in the words, imagery was very good also, Dark, descriptive. Thank you for entering the contest!
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kewlness
This was amazing. I loved the creativity you poured out with this. You didn't just talk about the bite, you talked about the aftermath and how the previous victim is looking for his own prey. This was full of imagery and good description. Great write and Great job!!! -
This is AWSOME!!! im so loving this... good luck in my contest....
Loves....
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I love thissss it's so dark and beautiful. Good luck and thanks for entering
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Very nice! I love it. Its a very neat way of describing things, Its macabre and its dark...I would hate to fall into that trap. I have a story thats similar to this idea. Nicely done!
Good luck!
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Well done
Wow.. mine seems dull next to yours... I think this was a wonderful poem... Good luck and Blessed Be...
Dee
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holy crap!!!! this is a wonderful poem, i absolutly loved this poem, very different from the other vimpire poems ive read. good luck
blessed be
kim -
wow, how beautiful....your words seem very thought out and alluring, and they flow so well.
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You writhed and wriggled but were caught in her vice, tight, death frame
As your blood was gulped into the vampires mouth drain
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I love vampires and i think this poem is totally awesome. i also love the way that you made it rhyme and have a sort of rhythm. not many people are able to do that. i applaud you.
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I love this poem.It is very in depth like all of your work.I am glad you enterd some of your poems into my contest,i enjoy reading your pieces of work.
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This was a fascinating write that i thoroughly enjoyed reading .. beautifully penned and full of vivid imagery .. my favorite lines would have to be:
But she had already enchanted you with a witches hex
And your warm, red, blood, fountained out of your jugular vein
You writhed and wriggled but were caught in her vice, tight, death frame
As your blood was gulped into the vampires mouth drain
No pain, just a sexual urge, no pain
Awesome!! And it flowed effortlessly too .. well done on a fabulous write
~Aimee
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wow.. this really is a good poem. i like it alot. good luck in my contest.
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nice i see i understand it which was good at frist i didnt get it but the ending i did so good work. i liked it.
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Yes i agree with the other peopes comments, THis is a new prospective, like some already said
was a breath of fresh air...
I think and will always think that vampires rule! but some people hust write poems based on the stereotype they think they are, and that really sucks, but your poem is awsome! I love the theme,the point of view from the victim side. really good.
Well Great work!
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this is a really awsome poem. Great job
Toodles, Danielle
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This is awesome! When you're done with this contest you could enter it in mine!!!
I'm not promising anything, but this is really amazing!
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A+++
DUDE THIS FREAKIN ROCKS! Vampires are kickASS!! This was so expressive and I love the depressing mood of this...just like me! wahh hoo! lol you better keep writing!! xoxo jXh xoxo -
All ure poems are awsome. Great job! I love vampires!
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hey i really like this b-c it had a great flow and wounderful imagination.
forgotton -
Incredible and Innovative
Ooo....I am in total agreement of Vampress..This was the highlight of my day, this poem!
Incredible point of view that had me grinning. So common are the poems from the side of the vampire that we've come to feel sympathy for them, when it is the mortals who should induce the sorrow. We've become hollow to our own pain and looked to the vampires, in their self obsorbed misery and immortality, to find solace. Well done.
~Liadan -
This was a breath of fresh air for the Vampire Kingdom! Most poems nowadays are very cliche like some have already said, but you changed things around, and instead of seeing it from the vampires side, we get to see it from the victims side. In all honesty, I think that's a great idea. Thank you for entering in my contest, and good luck.
Vampress -
Wow- this was really dark and imaginatively. Keep up the good work because this was well written
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9/10
Vampire poetry is usually very cliche and boring, this however was refreshing and interesting, well done for proving this subjects worth
Great Write (push) -
not what I normaly like but the poem was a good one very well done, it flowed very well
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wow this was a great poem. i'm speechless about it. it was a very good write! well keep writing!
Bailey -
fuckin trippy
its all mystic and dark. its awesome. i mean, the way the wording is, it sends chills down my spine. i love the chills. you are making me feel your writing, and thats always a good thing. keep it up. i love reading stuff like this. (i could feel the blood running down my throat) -
I really like all the description you put into your poem. I greatly enjoyed reading it
*~*Becca*~* -
Once again, I must say you did a splendid job on this piece! You did wonderful! I love to see your poetry!
In Existence and Vanquished,
-Everyones Dead -
Woah! This was some poem!! It was like a horror movie in the form of a poem. It was so powerful, so deep... Your images were amazing and your wording was euqally fantastic! I haven;t read many poems about monsters, but that is what makes this poem so original. So many poeple write poems about things that don't exist or have never happened, and they are amazing! I think this poem fits into this category.
You're a wonderful poet, keep up the great work!!!!!
---Katy -
WOW! this was really great!
i love reading about vampires.. and this piece created a great picture to imagine and it had a really nice flow and creative rhyming... great job so thanks for sharing.
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This is such a cliché, Vampires dont exist! why bother writing poems about them? spend your time on something more worthwhile next time.
Polly .X. -
*grins* this doesnt describe real vampyrs very well.. but it does show the fairy tale vamps... I can understand that your not very informed... but yes it was a great write I enjoyed reading it keep up the good work and maybe do a study on the vampyr's
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wow. this is very good! i love the picture of how she got him. it made me laugh in a sickish way. she reminds me of myself. weird. i love vampire writes and this one is deffinately up in my favorites. excellent work.
-Rachel -
Wow! I really loved this poem! I thought it was awesome... I like how you wrote this piece... Very creative... The poem lays out a story for you to follow and it gives you great imagery... What can I say? It was an awesome poem! I love reading about vampires and I hope you keep on writing kool pieces like this!
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awsome!
wow! yea this 1 was awsome! i loved it! i love the whole seductress vampire thing goin on!~kiersten~ -
very good and manipulative ! keep it up!!
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This was pretty good. I really enjoyed reading it. Very descriptive in parts and very contemplative. Wonderful Job!
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Awesome!
Hey Georges (by the way where is your 'Georges' signature at the end it's missing
) this is a beautiful piece of writing. I have a love of vampires, so this was a gem to read. The detail you've put into this write is brilliant it's so vivid and vibrant, the imagery came alive when I read through this. Brilliantly written Georges; fluid, lucid and articulate. Well done.
~Samantha
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wow! this is... awesome!!! love the descriptiveness and all that good stuff! its just great! love the wording... flowed together very, very nicely!!!
Keep on keepin on!
Gotta
Kay -
Excellent poem. I *loved* the vocabulary. And the flow was pretty awesome, I had a rhythmn in my head the whole way through.
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Nice poem. I really liked it.
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Wow. im speechless. I loved the imagery. I could almost feel the bite, and see the sights as im "stalking my victim". Very good!!
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Great write!! I loved these lines:
No regard for life as it feeds your eternal, catatonic, state
No need for sex, no need to mate, just the desire for blood and hate
No chance for love, just sharp incisors
No chance to see the sun or the light, just the darkness divider
You did a very good job!
All the love and luck in the world!
Kat -
Absolutely awesome!!
"Ample bosoms, ample curves, ample charms
Surely this lady could do you no harm?
And she lifted her cloak, to give you access
Asked you to touch her, asked you to caress
And she kissed you many times, tenderly on the face
Then she invited you over to this darkened, lonely, place
You wanted her, you wanted her, desiring her sex
But she had already enchanted you with a witches hex
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This peom really shows the seduction that vampirism is..and its morbid and dark, which I love..keep up the awesome poems^^ -
3 T's
this poem was so not lame. it had great flow and i loved the theme....so clutch shouldn't have bothered reading it if it only bothered him.....congratulations Georges -
{shudders} oooh, skeery!!!
{gulp} Indeed, Leech!!! Eek! Wow...MUST disagree with clutch...this is an exemplary write on those cloaked in the Dark Shadows...Beautifully penned, my Friend...good thing there's Light in my rooms...ya done skeeeeerd me again!!! hehehe
see ya!!! {runs & hides} ..Wanda
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will you hate me greatly if I say this was lame? Just...ugggghhh... I am sick of vampires and darkness and blood and all that jazz... That's my opinion and I dig your work, but not this...
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this was pretty amazing i really enjoyed it. it is bone chilling at some parts!m -lacer
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Excellent
This is a great write. You have described the vampire and her victim's lust so well, it really makes the reader "desire" to read on. The imagery was so real, and the reflection on the kill of the man was very effective. Well-wrote, once again Georges. Take care, Kate
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Good write the lines seemed a bit too long to me to start but once I got into the flow of the read it all worked fine. Love the 4 lines at the end all starting "No". Nice job. Quite gruesome really and so strange because I've just featured one of my old vampire ones from ages ago Cool stuff.
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WOW! This was such a great write! VERY VERY creative and dark (darks great in my book ) I love your wording as usual... great stuff!
'moonlight
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