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I am Eve

I am Eve, eating fruit,
and I could not stop with that apple!
In sun-drenched gardens, I dine on cherries –
Lips sticky and stained with their juice.

Peaches beckon, warm and ripe,
in thrall to their scent I surrender!
Swooning, I reach, I pluck, then bite
into downy, yielding flesh.

Maddened with it, mangoes are next;
will this hunger ever end?
With eager fingers I pry at the skin
to expose the sweet golden meat.

I am Eve, eating fruit,
and I could not stop with that apple!
All of my days, enchanted, I’ll roam
this exquisite, infinite orchard.

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Written August 16th, 2004 Minor edit 5/27/07

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  • Daniela Violin silver member
    July 26
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    I'm not sure how this is erotica unless it has an underlying meaning but I liked this.


  • Velvet Rose Petals
    March 2

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    ha very nice! I love how it is so creative, and the abundance of fruit you used in it. Great job!
    Rose


  • Callisto Athena gold member
    March 2

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    Great poem, Hon.. Oh this makes me soooo hungry for fresh, sweet vine-picked fruit.. And I don't care, I am Eve, I will eat to my heart's content!! Loved this!

  • Trinity AC
    January 19, 2008
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    Great piece of work. Fluid and visible. Made me hungry.

  • Mercury Rising
    May 28, 2007

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    To see Eve thoroughly enjoying the ambrosial fruit salads of Eden is surely a more delicious picture than having her suffer for centuries for taking one lousy bite out of an apple. A real pleasure to read, and best of luck in the contest.

    David Michaels

    • Lilac Moon silver member
      May 28, 2007
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      Thank you, David! This really was a rather defiant piece... heh

      So glad you enjoyed it.

      Lilac Moon

  • Lilac Moon silver member
    January 22, 2005
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    Thanks for the comments, Shiny New! And I think you could be right. I will add this to the erotica category (maybe more readers will show up -- heh).

    Lilac Moon


  • Shiny New
    January 14, 2005
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    Excellent

    Yum - I really think this should be in the erotica section - or is that just me? :-) Very vivid and luscious.........hmmmmmmm!

  • ecrivain01
    December 15, 2004
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    I laughed out loud when I read this. It was so funny. You are a truly unique young lady.

    Jim Dunlap

    • ocerus
      February 3
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      Bob Dunlap

      • ecrivain01
        February 3
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        No, I do not know him.

        Sorry.

      • ocerus
        February 3
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        I was wondering if you knew a dear old friend of mine. His name is Bob Dunlap. He lives - or lived - in New Haven, CT. Please im if you kow him or of him! Thank you! - ocerus

  • Lilac Moon silver member
    August 23, 2004
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    Greedy, yes! And regarding Adam? In a way, HE is the orchard. Heh.

    The poem was written for a male friend who told me that the sight of a woman eating fruit really got to him. So I just had to tease him.

    Thanks for the comments!

    Lilac Moon


  • S A Adelmann
    August 22, 2004
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    And not even sharing with Adam? You should be ashamed - he likes fruit, too. I like the descriptions of each of the fruits - you used the senses very well in your imagery. Nice. (But greedy...lol)

    Scott

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