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Gently Dangerous

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GENTLY DANGEROUS


Life is full of brutality,
Danger haunts from the mind.

If anger seethes, and fury feeds
You'll know fear of another kind.

Prices are paid in blood these days;
No compensation for the pain, 

So those who hate, 'tis an open gate
Mark your spot and take good aim.

Make it good; draw the bead,
Your bullets, I await, my sweet.

Beware, I'm primed; this best be timed;
This fight's gonna raise the heat.

Make your move; can't wait all day,
What's wrong? Not sure anymore?

Just raising your gun for the fun?
Come on Bully, let's settle this score.

Innocents die, by your cold, hard heart;
Now, the flipside's about to come

You must think the meek are just too weak
But, you're wrong, you "Son of a Gun."

I'd never murder in cold blood
That way just isn't my style.

But I will defend to the bitter end,
So, prepare for your longest mile. 

Your terror acts maim many souls
And you don't even care, 

So it's up to me and any who will be
Willing and ready out there.

I abhor violence in any form,
And lives lost become your dues

But, if you buck me, you're gonna see
That's the time when you're gonna lose!

So get back to life, learn of its value,
Use that thing called your brain.

Cause I am real nice, 'til you roll that dice,
Then I'm gonna end your game!

I hope you don't die, I really do,
Yet, I've a right to protect mine and me,

You're just too blind, closed off your mind;
Well, I'm gonna help you see!

The danger has now turned defensive play,
And your hand still warms that gun,

But you couldn't believe, or couldn't conceive
I'd fight back, so you've turned tail and run!

By Kelly Varner Johnson


(Photo by Reflections Studio:
Grant Johnson, of Kelly Johnson)

This is my opinion, a shoutout written shortly after the 9/11 attack. We are all in this battle, many nations, and we must each be prepared because it can happen at any time, and to any one of us. Just be ready. I am, in my own personal way. I am one angry peacekeeper right now. Please stand up for the underdogs of this world.

 

/Terrorist are bullies who have grown up.

Author notes

I'm a peacekeeper by nature, and this poem tends to confuse people when they hear that and read this. The road to keeping peace takes many forms. Mediating through communication is what I do best, helping stop arguments or a possible physical altercation. I'm open-minded and hear both sides to every story. I don't like to take sides, but have had to on occasion. As a little girl, I was so small that I became a visible target for bullies to try and show off some bravado or low self-esteem? Though I was small, I had other things going for me that they couldn't see on a visual level, at first. I'm not meek but I'm a quiet person. Generally speaking. I am and always have been extremely shy, but I'm not generally fearful. I'm sure many deem me as a walking contradiction, and that's okay. It is confusing. But, once a person gets to know me, they, somehow, find their own understanding as it refers to my personality. I used to "wear my feelings on my sleeve," but now I just cover myself head to toe. LOL! I do. I do better than I used to, but still . . . I'm quick to assess a situation and respond. This can be good and has served me well for most occasions, but for others I ended up apologizing for "jumping the gun." See? I'm not even sure why I am this way, but I just am. I'm always working on self-improvement and striving to be the best person I can be. There are some issues, or perhaps beliefs, that I will not waver on, and the feelings and how I will react in a dangerous situation such as an unprovoked attack on myself, my loved ones or even strangers. I defend the underdog. Always have, always will. I don't like violence and strive to avoid it, go around it, and so on, but I certainly believe in self-defense for all. I also believe every person is entitled to his or her beliefs as well, even if I don't agree with those beliefs. As for this poem, well, I'm just tired of the state this world is in. And, I know there are many others around this huge globe who feel the same way. As long as there are human beings, there will be division, violence and war. I know this poem will anger many people, but it always has and probably always will. I've been blamed for the state various governments are in from here to across the globe, just because I have an opinion! And, I've never been too interested in politics so that doesn't make sense. It's just a shoutout, sharing my angst. No one has to like it or approve of it. I am one person, one human being, not some political figure with agendas. I am not my government nor would I ever desire involvement into any other governmental factions. This is just me, okay? But, I do believe it's coming down to every man or woman for his or herself. Look around. My best to you all!--Kel

Kel
Written June 17th, 2002

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Terrorists are bullies and they all need therapy! Always stand up for the underdog!--Kel

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  • kvwriter silver member
    March 11, 2008
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    Thank you, Reese, for reading, and thank you for the applause too.

    I appreciate you sharing the message you got from this write which is very similar to some others yet different too because you've come to know more things contained within my personality and being than most.

    It then helps you have a better and deeper, even, understanding of what this write is saying, what I'm saying . . . and why.

    Kelly

  • lojol
    March 11, 2008
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    almost forgot one more thing applause.

  • lojol
    March 11, 2008

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    I do beleive creative peaple such as your self are the true warriors. The peaple who destroy things and peaple and others energy I think have to learn from peaple like you. This poem makes me think about things like that, another great write.

  • Bob Fox
    March 1, 2008

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    Kelly

    At your feet I now bow. The tough, gutsty write not at all to popular nowadays. But hell you have my hand. So sad how soon we forget. My friend, to this day has not seen a sin of his Nephew from the wretched day


    • kvwriter silver member
      March 1, 2008
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      Thank you, Bob, for the read. I believed this work might touch you in a positive way.

      And I do have your hand, my friend.

      Kel


  • Ellis gold member
    January 18, 2008
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    Extremely well crafted poem

    Love the rhyme scheme. Terrific work.
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  • flaed
    January 13, 2008
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    interesting. new view. thanks.

  • Just4u
    August 15, 2006
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    We pretty much all crave peace, domestically and internationally, but there will always be bullies and eventually there will come a time where we have to defend
    our self. You can only "turn your cheek" so much and then
    one needs to fight back, whether it is verbally to back
    the bully down or physically to show you ain't gonna
    take it anymore. As long as there are the haves and have nots
    we will have conflict. It truly is a sad state when we are in though when a little girl is killed for a pair of designer
    tennieshoes or coat off their back. We usually have three
    options...to try to talk our way out it, turn and try to escape, or stand up to them and fight if need be, if there is no escape possible.

    Hugs...Eddy
    Edited on Aug 15, 9:16 p.m. because 'knot spealing '.

  • Dark The Poet
    August 15, 2006
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    Hello' I got as much from your notes as I did from your well written poem. When I read that you were bullied as a child I thought to myself, gee how old is she, where did she go to school. You see I was a bully from 1964-1969. I moved around a lot and this was my method of winning friends, so I thought. Unfortunately fo me I almost died in 1969, bad heart. After a year when I went back to school I thought I was going to be stompt to death. I wanted to flatter myself and say they forgave me, but I wasn't important enough to bother with. Thats how I got out of the violance game. I thank you for reminding me of this lesson.
    Much Love


    • kvwriter silver member
      January 21, 2007
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      Very telling . . .

      Thank you for sharing such a personal part of yourself. You are greatly appreciated! I believe this could be a story of incredible worth that would help so many people. Would you be willing to be the subject of a feature, along with me, that I believe would help the bully and those bullied to, perhaps, understand why this happens and how a complete turn-about can happen? I'm a novelist under the pseudonym, Kelly R. Stevens, but my I write all my non-fiction under my own name, real name--Kelly Varner Johnson. I'm still a journalist and I truly believe this would help so many people. Think about it and let me know. We'll go from there. And, I'll understand if you don't want to do this. Just think about it for now. And, thank you for your honesty. That is brave and admirable. No matter what your decision is, I want you to know that. No matter what, that's how I feel about you.--Kel

      • Dark The Poet
        January 22, 2007
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        I would love to.

        I am looking for new expriences. I have also written a short story myself titled, "Rebecca's Wheel" You know like what goes around comes around. I will be off line due to moving from 1-25-07 to 2-1-07. If I don't hear from you before I catch you after. My phone number is in the book(N.M. Williams)
        Much Love


  • paullallady silver member
    August 15, 2006
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    very good

    The first few lines seemed a little rough, but then I got with the flow and it was wonderful. It did flow nicely and I liked how you carried me along with someone who was standing up to ignorance, hatred and stupidity. And I am glad you ended it the way you did, with the guy turning tail and running. It was the perfect way to end it.


  • raggyann
    August 15, 2006
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    i felt alot of pain writen in these words
    a story of bitterness and battles
    inner strength is written here also
    i think this poem left me feeling some what sad
    the people of this world does have to defend their self and their rights
    great poem


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    August 15, 2006
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    Very nice peace with great rhythm and flow. Enjoyed the views expressed. Nice write from start to finish. keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny

  • taurus of torres
    August 15, 2006
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    wow...don't want to get on your bad side! great job.


  • Jeri gold member
    August 15, 2006
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    I love the strenght of this poem. I agree with you about standing your own. I was and am a small female. Very petite and stand a whole 5'1. So I do understand that to keep MY peace I have to have strong legs. I do what I have to do and if comes the need to cry about it, I just cry.
    BRAVO!!!!!
    Your skills are fantastic and you have been a pleasure to read.
    God's touch to you
    Jeri


  • gOD in Neutral
    August 15, 2006
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    realistic/powerful

    I can see eye to eye with the concepts here. Your words ring true, because peace is never free, and even pacifists can and will fight to protect themselves and what they hold dear. I really liked your rhyming style and just the general way this was written. Great subject. Great work.

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    August 15, 2006
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    This poem strikes a mean (as in good) chord with me...I can't thank you enough for writing it~ As a disabled veteran I know the value of defending this country as well as the cost. You have done a remarkable job of sending a powerful message. There is never anything pretty about violence, and I think deep down there isn't anyone that wishes it, some however are engineered to think it is the only way, to those we must defend our fellow man from harm. Thank you so much for a super write.
    I too felt it was almost lyrical and was glad to read later that you intend it to be so. One final note...your authors notes were almost another piece in themself...you might consider putting them togethere elsewhere in free form and posting...your notes were almost as well written as you posted work. Thank you and God Bless....Suzi


    • kvwriter silver member
      January 21, 2007
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      Sorry so late!

      Hi Suzi, thank you for your incredible comment concerning my poem, "Gently Dangerous." I can't tell you how much your words meant to me as I've endured much hatemail and so on. I understand you are veteran, disabled, and I am so saddened by that fact. I must thank you with all I've got for fighting for our freedom! I've sent up an extra prayer for you and life will get better. My son fought in this present war and my poem "Dear Soldier" would surely boost your spirits. Just hang in there. You have my admiration and love--always--forever!--Kel


  • Anjole-Of-The-Artz
    August 15, 2006
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    Perfect.

    I really love this poem. I love the style you write in and I really enjoyed the concept. It is very creative and you obviously have a lot of talent and you know how to use it. Your going on my favorites for sure. <3

  • kvwriter silver member
    August 15, 2006
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    Thank you. It is a touchy subject. Appreciate your read!--Kel


  • FaeryPixieFey
    August 15, 2006
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    I thought this was very well done. Peace is a hard thing to ask for in this world of warring factors-from school years on. Good job. RobinRae.


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    August 31, 2004
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    strong poem and very true at heart.Great write with a seamless flow.Best of luck in contest and blessed be

    ~~Serenity~~


  • kvwriter silver member
    June 22, 2004
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    Hmm. Well, you tried and I thank you for that. And, yes, this speechless something is a very peculiar sensation, especially when we're supposed to be able to express so much with our words. I have to say in all honesty, that, though our ability to communicate helps us express ourselves, it also hinders us, because there are no words to really describe those really unigue undertones of life and experiences and feelings and sensations, etc. That's just a speechless sensation. Thank you very much for the attempt. I think I'll just stop questioning this write and let it be as it will, on its own. That's one of your favorite words. We're on our own, and we're speechless. Write something about that. Maybe I will too. Hmm. Some inspiration, at least. Make it a good day!--Kel And, thanks again . . .
    Edited on Jun 22, 12:56 because 'Too much of a perfectionist. Was missing a littly bitty s. '.


  • Connor Blackbird
    June 22, 2004
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    Uh...

    There's something very funny about this poem to me, because it is so drastically different from everything else you've written. But, I suppose that was the point, eh?

    As it is, it doesn't have a very real feel to it, knowing what it comes from. I read now of a person who seems determined to pacify the world and make this whole earth a pretty pink little utopia angrily yelling back at terrorists, even when the most violent people in our death-campaign-loving White House are still trying to feign sadness. Now, as real or surreal or completely fake that sentence may have seemed, it was very much just an improvised bit of very little.

    To be quite plain, this poem has left me "speechless", a word you seem to enjoy using. I can't tell if that's because it's so perfect for its purpose that nothing need fixing or if it's like the Articles of Confederation- beyond fixing in a way that would make it reasonable. I'm going to assume the former.

    Hmm. This speechlessness is a most peculiar sensation.


  • theGazzelle
    April 30, 2004
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    Skipped to this one as I was eager to see what your wanted me to see. Gotta go back to past comments to find the title of the other one you mentioned.

    As part of my field experience for the college of Education at KSU, I did work-study in the Boys and Girls Club of America in Ravenna, Ohio (next town east).

    One of my projects was a gun safety course. A lot of prep had to go into this: permission slips from parents, assurances that the potential for accidents were nil, and that politics would not be introduced. The theme was, "You just found a pistol in you best friend's daddy's car (bedroom, wherever). What cha gonna do?" Incentive was time at a local firing range (time and material donated by said firing range). Out of 30 kids who took my course, four boys and two girls got to go shoot. I was pretty rigid, and extremely concerned about kids and loaded guns around me. My point is this: I made them memorize "Gazzelle's Three Rules of Gun Safety." Influenced by NRA'S "Ten Commandments" and the controversial "Guns don't kill people..." my rules went like this:

    1. There's no such thing as an unloaded gun.
    2. If you have to ask if a gun is loaded, then you have no business handling it."
    3. Guns don't fire by themselves, but we must always pretend like they will.


  • carlspenc1
    April 3, 2004
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    grand poetry

    this poem is really well written and contains plenty of feeling, the contents work well together and it is a real pleasure to read. tis a grand poem.
    thank you for your earlier comments on my poetry too.
    Edited on Apr 03, 8:54 because ''.


  • kvwriter silver member
    January 5, 2004
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    All 28 of me, I wrote the poem shortly after the 9/11 attack. The country, and myself, was in a state of shock at this point. It's where I stand, though I will always be a peacekeeper, and am "easy-going" by definition, I do have a side that only violence can turn on, a defense mechanisim. I will never harm any living creature, but I will defend them against those who wish to destroy lives. Like ET, I'm not one to stand idly by, even for total strangers. Sometimes, to keep the peace, and survive, we must be willing to defend our own lives, if that comes into play. Too often it does, and too often the victim loses. Read the news, watch the news. I'm not going to be a victim. I do, however, prefer love over violence any day. Love, light and peace!--Kel


  • kvwriter silver member
    January 5, 2004
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    Thank you so much, Mr. Johnson, not only for your inspiring message concerning the poem, and our son and daughter who are, both, serving our country, but for you too! Thank you for serving our country, and for making sense out of something I feel strong about, and that's our right to defend ourselves, others, and our country. Your message was so encouraging, and your daughter will be in my prayers, my son, and you as well. Take heart. We must press forward. Again, thank you! Love, light and peace!--Kel

  • forevermore
    January 4, 2004
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    excellent

    Awesome stuff. I completely agree. Wow, this poem filled me with such emotion, I felt like I could do anything after I read it. I often think about what I would do in the face of danger and I know now that if I ever was, I'd fight for myself. If I ever was in danger, this poem would pop into my head and remind me on what I have a right to do to defend myself. Thanks so much for sharing!


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    January 4, 2004
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    I did have a hard time with the tempo of this poem, until I read that you are turning this into a song, then it made sense. As for the moral questions inherent in this poem, I contemplate these very questions from time to time, especially when I start to feel like "being a hero". I have stood between girls on the street and predator types who are bothering them. Someone has to stand between the innocent and the evil. But where to draw the line...it's easier to solve a problem while it is still small. To wait until it is clear & present danger is to defend oneself against a full-blown problem. The shades of circumstances are so diverse that it is a case-by-case deal. But I'm glad ytou address this issue. It's a touchy subject. Nobody want to be judgemental, but somebody has to have some courage. Peace & Love is the answer, but love takes many forms. ET

  • BluexxEyes19
    January 4, 2004
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    This is a very good piece! I totally agree with you that violence is not the answer unless you are defending yourself or as it is called "self-defense". I really enjoyed this! Great job!
    Megan

  • Healing Heart
    January 4, 2004
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    This is a awesome piece very powerfull abvout a very powerfull subject. Thanks for sharing this. Healing Heart. Job well done.


  • Redstormy gold member
    January 4, 2004
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    I think I've read this before but I can't see if I responded. You said things that need to be said my friend and you did it beautifully as usual.

    Red


  • catz Moderators member
    January 4, 2004
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    A strong and most impressive write, Kel. And I agree whole heartedly. I hope to never be put into a situation where I have to choose to protect myself or loved ones with violence and killing.... but I'm also for 'gun rights' and the right to protect myself or others. And I know in my mind that if push comes to shove, I'll have my own weapon shoved in their face and ready to pull the trigger.

    It's amazing how you've put this poem together with such feeling and strength. Hooray for you, Kelly, you've spoken for many of us. And knowing what a compassionate and loving person you are makes this poem even more meaningful.


    baraka bashad
    Dee


  • dittysri silver member
    January 4, 2004
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    Our country is in a sad state when one does not feel safe in their own homes. I served in WWII and Korea and know a little about the subject. Yes, I am a pacifist at heart, however there are too many others who are not, against whom we must practice self defense. When I was growing up, we didn't even lock our doors at night so this crime wave we are axperiencing now, as well as for the past thirty years, is atrocious to me. I experienced one break-in when I lived in Memphis but as I ran for the front room the perp exited the front door leaving rubber burns on the front porch with his tennis shoes. When the officers came to investigate, one of them said, "Wouldn't you like to have been standing by that window with a baseball bat when he stuck his head in?" Of course I replied with a enphatic YES, to which he said, "Just always be sure the perp falls inside the house. I am well armed and at least one weapon is fully loaded at all times, so you see, I agree with you darlin' and hate the modern pacifist mandate to give in and let the perp take whatever he wants. Although I pray for such criminals and terrorists, I will not stand idly by while they operate in my presence. Our law enforcement is handcuffed by the very courts that should be punishing the criminals. Woaw! Didn't mean to take the floor from you Kel. Love you and all your writes. Tell Grant I said Hi and I like his work too. jean


  • January 4, 2004
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    Evocative and expressive

    I have to agree, I try to be a pacifist for the vast majority of the time, but I refuse to stand by and let them have their way- if I can stop something and help for the better I will whether people like it or not. Sorry I'm rambling, but this poem got me so darned fired up! Why shouldn't we protect and fight for what we believe in - it is our human right. Ok I'll stop now *deep breaths* Thats better. Anyway, back to the poem itself. It is very effective in how it uses its subject and how it phrases it. I particularly like:

    "Prices are paid in blood these days
    No compensation for the pain"

    - That really brought home how the world has altered to what is now normal. *shudders* Also the ending is perfect, pulls all the loose ends nicely:

    "But you couldn't believe, or couldn't conceive
    I'd fight back, so you've turned tail and run!"

    Very well written, and extremely evocative to any reader. Well done.

    lynn xXx

  • Cookie89
    January 4, 2004
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    AMAZING!!!!

    Great write!! Im in awe of this display of utter complete talent! Great use of rythm, rhyme was amazing, style expressed every single thought in this peice crystal clear. Amazing work! Reading this reminded me of something that was read in a class for dramatic art and writing. This is the kind of piece that will stay with you for the rest of your life and comes into your head at just the right time to make you remember and fill your heart with warmth. Wonderful work. Truely amazing.

  • Apparition
    January 4, 2004
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    Kelly, I strongly agree with your opinion. Violence seems to rule the world, these days. And it continues to grow. Aggression seems to be way of the world , backed by such a strong feeling of entitlement. We need to stand our ground, have the right to defend ourselves, our loved ones and our property. And I strongly honor those who have the courage to do so.
    Maddie

  • missvincent
    January 4, 2004
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    Thanks for featuring this, I might have never gotten to enjoy this otherwise. I share your same view of violence, though it is something that affects my day to day life unfortunetly. Anyways, I really enjoyed this. Have a good day


  • Triste
    January 4, 2004
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    This was definitely a very well written write, as a lot of the others have said. I loved the strength I felt from you in this write, laced with courage and determination. The rhyming was excellent, near flawless, and the couplet kind of set up really separated the thoughts here, so that each thought was expressed clearly. Flow was pretty good, as well. A very good write, keep it up.
    ~Renay


  • Chuck Johnson silver member
    January 4, 2004
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    Dear Kelly

    With a son in the service, and the daily toll that takes, I praise your courage and remarkable grace. Beauty isnt always from without but also from within. Courage isn't always from others but can also be a personal friend. I think you reflect your country well and provide for all of us veterans active or not, a good example of motherhood in times of trouble. Freedom requires a price from us all and that price is terrible to behold. Yet, we willing pay it when it calls. My daughter is also a Kelli, and a Johnson. She has honored me as your son has honored you, by being a police officer and facing those terrible hours. I too worry about her as you do your son. I worry that she will be alright and that she will sleep each night in safety. I know you feel that way also for your child. Trust in God, our country, and your son. In the fight against evil, the war is never won.


  • As Autumn Falls
    January 4, 2004
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    So it was written before the war? Thats very interesting... Was it written before 9-11? If so, that's very interesting because of the part about the planes you threw in there.

    ~All 28~

  • CaptainMidnight
    December 27, 2003
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    excellent!

    an appropriate title...
    And noble sentiments expressed here. Basic instincts and natural
    impulses...sadly, should not need such long explanations!
    (I'm a little curious about the lyrical format...as in song structure)...a ballad style? (I'm a bit of a lyricist myself).
    Enjoyed reading this! ---reminds me a bit of Robert W. Service.
    Top 'o the Season to you!


  • kvwriter silver member
    December 24, 2003
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    So many perceptions concerning this. Guess it's just cut and dried for me. But, I respect everyone's opinion. And, Miah, thank you for your own offering on this. You are a wonderful son, first, before you ever became a soldier, and if I may take a bit from JC up above, "You truly rock!" Love you! Will be sending the questionaire for the soldiers who want tributes written for them, and we'll go from there. Need some kind of address, anything will do. Ask around. Or, if need be, I can post them, and let you know which tribute is done and for who, and you can let them know and they can log on a read it. We'll see what works. Be getting that to you shortly. Also sent an e-mail with the number I can be reached at during Christmas, in case you need me. I really miss you, Miah. The holidays are not the same without you here. Tears Gotta get off. Cooking Christmas dinner and all, but we'll get together again soon. Be careful, and alert, at all times, okay? Merry Christmas, Miah!--Love, Mom

  • jc mcgee
    December 24, 2003
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    this really and truly rocks, should make a kickin' song. well done.

  • Miah
    December 24, 2003
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    Powerful

    I am Kelly's son. I am currently deployed to the desert and fighting for your lives, rights, and freedoms. I am defending you. My Mom is not violent and I am not violent either. Some people have taken this out of context. We are peacekeepers. Love, light, and peace to you all.
    Miah
    USAF Soldier


  • MuseStalker
    December 24, 2003
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    courageous

    This is a difficult subject for me, as I don't believe in violence. But, I agree...there comes a time when one has to take a stand against those who seem to know no other language. Unfortunately, I think that those forced into such action are damaged by it. And, in the end, a violent person may have been stopped...but a non-violent person has become violent. Please don't get me wrong...I do agree. And I know for certain that there are things I will fight for...because I have. But, as I said, this is a very difficult and conflicting subject for me. Thanks for sharing this - I think it explores a subject we all need to look at very closely. And, thanks for having the courage to write about something that is sure to polarize readers. I applaud your courage.


  • Redstormy gold member
    December 24, 2003
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    Kelly I hear you in this one, I could seriously relate to this line.

    "You must think the sweet are just too weak
    But, you're wrong, you "Son of a Gun." "

    I have often been accused of being weak for being kind. So that line hit me between the eyes. Nice to see someone that agrees. Sometimes it takes all the strenghth in the world to be kind.

    Great write Kelly.

    Red


  • DarkAngel2
    December 23, 2003
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    awesomeness =P

    Wow awesome poem, every once in a while you come across really really good poems on here and this is once of them. *applauds* You can really see how you feel in this. I'm the same as you, I don't believe in violence, to me it solves nothing but if need be I'd defend myself if I had to and or any of my friends if they needed help. Anyways, awesome poem, great talent hun Keep up the good work

    Sarah
    ~*~Angel~*~
    "We look into another's eyes only to see them slowly slip away.."


  • Jaden silver member
    December 23, 2003
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    I remember reading this one. . .wasn't sure because the title seemed unfamiliar. . .I can just see you in your Texas home donning a white hat, looking for the bad guys wearing black hats.

    Good poem, Kelly.


  • yumanbeing
    December 23, 2003
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    I love this as I can tell it is so truly heart felt and said with passion - not someone listening to their own words but to their heart and soul - also a person who has dedided to make a specific stand with no question they will react with decisiveness - excellent and passionate

  • Redeemed
    December 23, 2003
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    Wow! I'm speechless. That was a great great poem. You are an awesome poet. I plan on reading more of your work.


  • WithCitrus
    December 23, 2003
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    great!

    Good lord...I think this is the best i've read so far. You should go into publishing, selling books, and things of that sort. You are an awesomeawesomeawesome writer!
    -Insignificant Me


  • kvwriter silver member
    December 23, 2003
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    Despite the "images" inside the poem, I never meant to disturb anyone. My point is that there comes a time when you either fight back, if being attacked without provocation, or risk being killed. People can yell at me, call me names, whatever, and I can just ignore them. But, I'm talking on a physical nature; a matter of life or death. I even state that I abhor violence and will try to avoid such at all costs. I also state that I hope the robber, rapist, etc. doesn't die "if" I happen to save myself. One of us will be hurt very badly or dead. The only thing I'm saying is that defending ourselves against muggers, rapists, robbers and the lot is not wrong. The tables should be turned. I hope more people start fighting back, when attacked and life is threatened, because that would put some of these criminals out of business. We shouldn't have to be victims. No. Not anymore. So, I hope you can read the poem with a bit more ease, as it's not meant to disturb, but to empower those of us who don't victimize people. And, I do apologize if the poem upset you in any way, because I'm not advocating violence--I'm stopping it dead in its tracks. Yet, I still have to stand on what I believe and I believe every human being has a right to defend themselves if they believe their lives are threatened. But, never would I go out and intentionally harm anybody. I treat my fellow human beings with compassion and respect. But, some people treat human beings with guns, bats, knives, suffocation, choking and so on. Would you let someone do that to you? Or you child? Your mother? Sister? Just something to think about, as difficult as that may be. Hope this makes better sense of my write to you. Thanks for commenting. Will visit shortly and check out some of your masterpieces! Love, light and peace!--Kel


  • Razors-Edge
    December 23, 2003
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    Sigh! I am at a loss really to comment. I find that I understand what you advocate and understand the message. I enjoyed the construction of the poem. I guess its the images inside the poem that disturbed me. Its not that I don't agree...its more that its hard to look at it. I guess that really is the strength of this poem. It says..."Look at me"...its not afraid to stand up to the "bully" A very powerful write. Thank You!


  • December 23, 2003
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    Wow, this is a very eye opening poem. I really do see where you are coming from, I never start fights or anything but I will finish them if I need to. This poem flowed very well. You did an excellent job and the authors comments on this help explain everything. Nicely done
    -Carina-


  • HotelCalifornia
    December 23, 2003
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    I really respect writers who are not afraid to speak their mind and let everyone know their opinions on controversial issues. I understand your viewpoint on self-defense and think it's great how you wrote what you felt and followed it up with a great explanation; most people have a tendency to push their opinions on others, but I liked how you simply stated hard facts and went from there. I could definitely tell this was written in the form of a song. Even though you stated that this was not politically influenced and was written before the war, it's really interesting and amazing how directly it relates to 9/11! It also reminds me of "The Devil Went Down to Georgia" by the Charlie Daniels Band. Great write, I enjoyed reading! Have a great holiday break!
    Edited on Dec 23, 9:24 p.m. because ''.

  • VenomousScorpio
    December 23, 2003
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    This poem was amazing and I applaud you. I also share your views on that you have a right to protect yourself and your loved ones. Standing there in fear is no way to live and I also plan on living, or die trying.
    Sinceritamente,
    Venomous Scorpio


  • insidethewalls
    December 23, 2003
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    That's awesome! I love the format, and the whole meaning of the poem. It shows that you're not gonna take crap from some loser, and I *applaud* you for that =) Great job on the poem/song and I hope you're never put into a position where this will actually happen!

  • AshesNWoNdErLaNd
    December 23, 2003
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    I agree with every thing in this poem it speaks the truth
    awsome write keep it up.

    †Midnight_Størm†


  • silencexx
    December 23, 2003
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    this was very cleverly written...very true and to the point...i like it! happy holydays(hmm dont know how to spellit too early in the morning) nice write!!


  • Mari Goes gold member
    December 23, 2003
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    I do agree with you! I hate guns, but to protect me and specially my kids I would not hesitate to use one.
    Sometimes (sometimes?) violence can only be answered with violence, and sadly enough, in must of the cases the one who uses a weapon to defend himself is the one who gets all the troubles after.
    A great write you have here!
    Mari


  • onelastkiss
    December 23, 2003
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    Make it good; draw the bead
    Your bullets, I await, my sweet;
    Just beware, I'm primed; this best be timed,
    This fight's gonna raise the heat.

    I really enjoyed these four lines.

    <3


  • December 22, 2003
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    Nice poem. Strong, and sends out your message like a bell chiming. I like your tone, I can tell it comes from you.

  • EvoV
    December 22, 2003
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    Thanks. I enjoy'd reading that. For some reason made me think moreso about political agression through the use of military actions rather than on a local person to person violence type of level. But I guess that is the beauty of a piece of art, people are free to take from it what they will. Thanks for writting it.


  • jendragon
    December 21, 2003
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    The flow of this is quite wonderful, and you've managed to use...vernacular?...in a very powerful way without detracting from the poem. I agree with most, if not all, of this, and it addresses a subject I -and perhaps many of us- have been thinking about lately. I truly enjoyed the read. Love, Jen.


  • haikumonk gold member
    December 21, 2003
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    And you're right. Police officers cannot get to the scene fast enough to save you. It's impossible. Dangerous encounters take only seconds, maybe minutes.... but units respond in four to forty-five minutes.... just what do you do in the gap? YOU PROTECT YOURSELF WITH EVERY MEANS YOU POSSESS OR FIND! End story.

    You're right on the money here.

    It's funny.... I know several politicians that have voted against citizens rights to carry guns and the politician has a gun in her purse.......... in California, she knows who she is!!! Makes me mad!

    Good write. Controversial for some... but not me.

    Don


  • December 21, 2003
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    Lovely poem.
    -paige-


  • hahaimdead27
    December 21, 2003
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    WOW!! this is really amazing!! !

  • Odyssey
    December 21, 2003
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    I loved the title of this. I also liked the like couplets, the lines that fall two by two...could almost be lyrics - certainly had a musical feel is it sifted through my mind.

    I often try to reason why it is we feel so angry, what makes fists our first gut reaction...we seem to be most comfortable when our lives are a painting of strife and disharmony.

    Aren't we a strange breed.


  • SomberShadowz
    December 21, 2003
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    Great

    I would have to agree with everything you wrote here. Violence is ridiculous. Yet we know no other way to express ourselves, some say it's human nature to be brutal. But we are capable of defining what is right and wrong. We are not brainless, sacks of bones. Though at times it seems so lol.. This was a very good write! I do hope to read more of your poems soon!
    ~Somber


  • dittysri silver member
    December 21, 2003
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    Right on Kel. You have written a masterpiece for self defense here. I do agree with you about vengence also, "Forgive your enemies and do good to them who despitefully use you". However, everyone has the right to defend themselves against attackers of every kind. Great write darlin',jean

  • Sideways
    December 21, 2003
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    This is an honest, well-written piece. I don't agree with everything in it, but it was great to read another point of view. You expressed your thoughts well, and in a non-offending way.
    I love the title, and the great wording.
    The format is a bit inconsistent, and some of the use of slang doesn't fit well, but neither of those things is too bad.
    Overall, great write. Happy holidays.

  • Cair
    December 21, 2003
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    Now this I like.and I feel the same way.keep writeing and don't lose that spark.and one day mabe just maybe you could be famous.
    So keep on writeing


  • myrataal silver member
    December 21, 2003
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    Powerful and true

    As I said many times before, Kelly - I love you for what you are: focused, determined, truthful and creative in your approach. You are a powerful, yet sensitive lady ... You make me proud to be called a woman. You stand for us all.


    Love.

    Myra


  • PurpleSky
    December 21, 2003
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    Right on now that's what a call a good piece of writing. I hope it made you feel better writting this because it made me feel better reading it. This was just so awsome. These words held so much emotion and determination it made me wan't to go tell that person who has been doing me wrong off, If you know what I mean. My favorite part of this was when you wrote
    you're just to blind, you closed off your mind;
    Well, i'm gonna help you see!
    so cool. Anyways this was a great treat so thank's


  • jaunty pill gold member
    December 20, 2003
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    How true. How true. Life is such a valuable thing and its ashame people take advantage of so much and never look back as it all falls apart. Its painful sometimes but we all move on...If we don't will all drowned in the great abyss of watching things around us change. Life can throw some dangerous curve balls and can also hurt us in a thousand ways...Its nice though at the end of the day though to say you survived it all. This was a very eye opening read that should be turned into a song liek you mentioned. It should also be made into a slogan for all america to see...This is the truth. The cold hard truth. And even though its painful , It is the way things are....A journey I will not forget. Simply remarkable and divine. I will be bookmarking this as it has made me feel so much emotion...Thank you.


  • kvwriter silver member
    May 26, 2003
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    Lol! Thanks Lakota. You made me laugh! And, I'm glad you understand the write with such clarity. We do have to fight back at times, and it's an issue that can't be avoided, if we want to survive, and if we want our loved ones to survive, even total strangers who are being brutalized. We start from dealing with bullies, then move up on the scale to where the real danger exists. And, in our world today, it doesn't get easier, so we either have to be prepared to defend, or prepare ourselves to die. Personally, I prefer to die of natural causes, not by somebody else's hand who thinks he/she rules the world. No. I stand by what I write, however contradicting it may sound. But, I gave fair warning with such a contradicting title, "Gently Dangerous," and that should lead people into the idea of the write, right away. Thanks again, for dropping in. Will visit you soon. Kel


  • Lakota
    May 25, 2003
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    Wow I found the bottom of the page! Some people write huge comments!!!!
    This was good I understand what you mean, about standing for your family if you had too. But not liking the rest of the crazyness in this world. nice write.
    Lakota x


  • kvwriter silver member
    May 3, 2003
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    Thank you John and Jean! I'm pleased to read that you, both, understand what I'm conveying in this write! Very pleased! And, I can't thank you enough for your wonderfully inspiring comments. Agreement in full--both ways! Thanks for stopping in! Will be visiting more of yours soon. Been making my way around. Hugs --Kelly


  • dittysri silver member
    May 3, 2003
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    Extraordinarily good

    WOW! I agree with your message 100% and love the strength with which you conveyed it. The rhythm and rhyming were outstanding. I loved it and you are right, I understand you better now, Bully for you Kelly. Maybe someday I will be able to write that good. jean


  • kvwriter silver member
    March 21, 2003
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    Thanks, Tam, for your comments and for making me smile. I can see that you, too, defend those you love and care about--which is what this write is about--defense of ourselves, personally first, and others, even total strangers. So, Lol! You're a terrorist, I'm a racist and a cowboy bigot (And, I even write cowboy poetry) and, well, whatever Mushy wants to label us. Anyone commenting, be prepared! Because this Mush guy doesn't know the difference between revenge and self-defense. I would defend myself, or others, at that moment, but I don't go after people for revenge, because that vindictive. If someone begins to strangle you to death, would you not fight back, save your life? That's self-defense, easy--revenge is pre-meditated, thought out, and generally, catching someone in an unaware state. My advice would be to NOT comment on this write any further, because my concern would be that, then those who commented would also become a target of Mushika's, and I'd rather not have any comments than to have to worry that others are being verbally attacked, called names, and so on. Leave this piece be. All will be well. Love and peace (Unless you attack me, physically--Lol) to all! Really! Kelly


  • Ladybug
    March 20, 2003
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    Kelly, this actually made me respect you a little bit more
    I have been so baffled with the war, news and media
    but after today I have a new sense of relief on the whole matter
    and this piece does me good. I am also a purring kitten and love all, but when you antaginize me I can be a lion....
    and who ever Mushikita is, needs to go get drunk or something because what griped about does not even exist.
    there, I stuck for my friend, so am I now a terrorist?
    that is how out of context that moron is.
    I like the poem
    yes it does cover several levels
    domestic, social, political and now world-wide
    in the sense of the war.


    Tamara


  • kvwriter silver member
    March 20, 2003
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    Baffled.

    Thank you, Jaden! "No provocation to begin with!" That's the confusion here. Baffled, I guess. But, this is a write dealing with self-defense on every level, which includes domestic, national, personal, you name it. Well, you did name it! Lol! What's up with this anyway? Take care! Hugs your way!--Kelly (A rose for Susan and a rose for Vicki-Soulwarrior)


  • Jaden silver member
    March 20, 2003
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    War is on everyone's minds these days. These are hard times, aren't they? And what you're talking about happens on all levels.
    Personal, Societal, National, World. . .

    Can't allow wrongdoings to go on if they have no regard or respect for someone's values, especially when there was no provocation to begin with.

    Take care, Kelly.


  • kvwriter silver member
    March 20, 2003
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    Critically inept. Needs fine-tuning. Thanks all! Actually, this write was written before "war" was a solid thought. Mushika, the "they" are anyone who enters my home to rob me, rape me, or hurt or kill any of my loved ones. Self defense is far from racism, but you just can't seem to grasp the "Gently" aspect of this write. Self-defense is what this is about, not revenge. And, TealsTear, thank you for understanding the write. Personally, I just think Mushika has developed a problem with me, personally, so hitting on my poetry is his revenge, but he'll notice I don't hit back--not threatened--so why be vindictive and lower myself to the level of a "thug" or even a terrorist, by playing vindictive games. I mean exactly what I say in the poem, as I'm a gentle person by nature, but I will fight to defend myself and even others who are attacked with violence, and that doesn't make me a racist! Lol! Mushika, maybe you'd be better off NOT reading my writes, because everything I say makes me either sexist, too Godly with beliefs you don't agree with, and/or racist. Hmmm. I tackled a drunken cowboy one time after he touched me inappropriately. So, I guess that makes me a bigot against cowboys! Lol! Mushika, you just don't get it, and you try too hard to put things in my writes that aren't even there. I'm none of the things you accuse me of being, except, yes, I do believe in God, and I do believe this is our one chance, this life, to get to where we're going. But, you'll just say again, "How do you know?" all the while singing your own songs, no questions asked. But, really, if you don't like my poetry, don't read it! That's your right! So, why do you keep coming back to plug empty criticisms that are not constructive in the least. You, Sir, have the problem, not me. I'm going to continue to write as I wish--and you don't need to be reading my work. That's your freedom--if you don't like it, quit coming back, because, to me, that's vindictive. I won't visit you--and you don't visit me. Because, you're far from trying to assist a fellow poet--you're just plain mean, and you've got problems, so go on about your business and enjoy your life. I wish you the best. And, I intend on enjoying mine as well. If you don't believe in self-defense or protecting family, friends, even total strangers from people like the Ted Bundys of this world, robbers, drive-by shooting sprees, and even one on one attacks, violence, actual violence against yourself or a loved one, then you have the right to NOT defend yourself, and it's sad that you won't even defend others, but the fact stands that I will! No questions! I'm a gentle person by nature, Mushika, but I won't take crap either. So, stay in your own space now, because it's obvious that it's not my poetry you're after--it's me! And, I have no clue as to why. Nor do I really care. I prefer people who would rather get to know me first before they go passing judgment on me, and even then, none of us even has that right--to judge one another. So, please do not read my poetry, and I certainly won't read yours. Lol! I don't even know who you are, but you sure have a strange way of introducing yourself. Good to meet you too, Mushika! Lol! Take care of yourself as you go your own way, and try occasionally, to think before you speak. Works wonders. Good luck, or blessings, or however you take it. Byeee!


  • March 19, 2003
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    I'm going to disagree with dear ole mushika and agree with Jaden. You made some excellent points here and said alot of things I've been trying to put in my poetry. Peace is an illusion (and I cry when I really think about this). We have to accept that when evil comes into this world, we have to stand up and fight it. We can't preserve peace when preserving peace means letting evil run around and do what it wants. Once evil has died, peace may become a reality. But it's hard to imagine that our world will ever exterminate all evil. I hope I didn't get too preachy there. The best part about it, is that this applies to all relationships (whether intimite or political).

    Anouther note, I think it's perfectly balanced. Alot of people say it's contridicting - but thats life! The world is full of paradoxs. We have to find balances between good and evil, Apollo and Dionysus. Too much of either will lead to sure destruction. Your write just couldn't be more perfect. --STP


  • silverael
    March 19, 2003
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    Mmmm... I find the "catch phrases", as mushika put them, somewhat distracting, but I don't have a problem with any form of cliche in poetry. On the other hand, I almost wonder if it wasn't done partially out of a sense of satire, intentional or not.

    I personally wouldn't go so far as to call it bad poetry, but I do find the idea rather conflicting to be pacifist and yet use any means, including violence, to defend one's self. Perhaps you are conflicted within yourself, and that's understandable between all the patriotism and media.

    Just my suggestion : maybe lose the somewhat sing-song rhythm of the poem to add readability. The rhyme seems a little forced, but... I'm not one to talk about that, I spend hours forcing things to rhyme just because I want the poem to be that way.

  • mushika
    March 19, 2003
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    Innocents die, by your cold, hard heart
    But, the flipside's about to come.

    You must think the sweet are just too weak
    But, you're wrong, you "Son of a Gun."

    "I don't believe in revenge"

    sure sounds like you do from this piece. I approach, any "I don't believe in...but" statement with serious suspicion. The poem makes little sense, and it is poor poetry, at best: a series of half-coherent ideas and catch phrases:

    'til you roll that dice,
    And, then I'm gonna end your game!

    so you've turned tail and run!

    Prices are paid in blood these days

    etc. I could cut & paste most of the poem as there is not an original though contained within.

    I can appreciate a well-written poem with which I do not agree. This, however, is not well-written.

    By the way, who is the "they" in your comment?

    But, until they wake up, we all have a right to defend our own lives, any way we must.

    Not a part of the poem, but curious to whom you are referring? Because it sure sounds like revenge tinted with racism from this reader.

  • Apparition
    March 19, 2003
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    Very strong message that needs to be heard. You said it very well, Kelly


  • Deke
    March 19, 2003
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    I love this poem; it says so much that really needs to be said about relationships and things in general. I sure am glad that I took the time to read it, and that you took the time to write and post it. Thank you for a wonderful read.
    Damon D. Brewer


  • Kalexi
    March 19, 2003
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    Amazing, and very powerful write, Kelly Lovely read

    Karen

  • In The Flesh
    March 19, 2003
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    Brilliant, absolutely brilliant. I feel the same and this is quite the summary of my feelings. I am bookmarkin this one. Everyone will shed their tears for the dead.

  • Phantasm
    March 19, 2003
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    superb

    Hey wow great poem. hahah I like how it ends "so youve turn tailed and run"


  • Stirrer of Stardust
    March 19, 2003
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    Great poem Kelly. The rhythm and flow are flawless. I happen to agree with what you've said.....then I think that it has to end somewhere, otherwise, there will be no peace. *Sigh*
    Life is complex, and I'm just plum-tuckered from thinkin' on it.

    Thanks for sharing.

    ~*~Sincerely, Janet~*~


  • AndrewHide silver member
    March 19, 2003
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    Kelly, this is very good, you have taken the subject of vengence and managed to write a poem with a voice which refects the subjects.
    You have talked of death, fighting, violance and retribution but the poems voice remains calm, not shouting or angry just a gently whisperd promise.

    This really is a cleverly written piece.


    Andrew


  • Blondita
    March 19, 2003
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    I think You made some excellent points in your write. Life so full of contradictions...and violence is never too far away. War doesn't solve anything , and the one proposed certainly wont deter extremism in any shape or form....not rattling on , but you made some excellent points - a good write.

    ~ Sonia ~

  • kvwriter silver member
    October 28, 2002
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    I know, Jaden, I know. Thanks for the visit. Be safe. ;)Kelly

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