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A Moment of Silence for the Swings

We have reached the brink

We stand teetering on the edge

We must wait for the signal
while we look ahead restlessly

So enthralled!  Our dreams may come true at last!

As we step into the abyss,
something catches the eye

Looking over our shoulders we see
Those ancient statues,
standing forever as a symbol of our past.

A last glimpse of the happiness that was has steadied our hearts

With a sigh and a smile,
we cascade into the adult world,
scraping our knees all the way.

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Written August 16th, 2004

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  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    October 13, 2004
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    interesting

    I miss my childhood!

    This poem has just reminded me of why. I miss it because there were no worries, no responsibilities, not too many hassles. For most, it is a time where continuous reaffirmation of being loved is present, and the greatest goal is to get through school and make our parents proud. However, for others of us, the transition is not quite so easy or smooth...there is abuse, neglect, ridicule, people looking down at you incessantly but paradoxically expecting that you will turn out to be the perfect adult.

    I sighed at this poem. Not because it sucked or anything (it doesn't), but because it holds such sentimental value.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora

  • CursedAttrition
    September 3, 2004
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    the transition into adulthood is one of th most difficult phases of one's life. the realization of independence and the new found responsibilities carry a great burden. your poem well expresses a nostalgia for how tings once were. it also presents the hesitation ("with a sigh") and the final realization that this is how it must be and it's time to look ahead to what the future may bring with a "smile" on your face.
    scraped knees can often leave scars, memories of those hardships of ou past, but without them, you can never grow. great poem.. ~Cursed Attrition


  • theDARK1 gold member
    August 16, 2004
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    as you take the journey to adulthood, itz better to have scraped your knees to help to overcome some of the drama and heartache that will be a part of your world. if you were sheltered your whole life, then that would have been a dis -service to you for it would be more of a nightmare trying to figure out what may lurk in the DARKness. not saying everything will be fine, but at least you will be somewhat prepared. good luck in life (as we all need it), DARK.

  • candyflo
    August 16, 2004
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    fantastic

    great poem welldone keep on writing and you will do really well , great work keep it up smashing , fantastic