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Dusk

 

Indigo skies, fill the air, with
the readiness of night;
Gathering rays, towards the
ever setting sun.
Clouds, becoming cumulative,
dancing, around the atmosphere,
fading out, to transparent.
Darkness, creeps over the
landscape, as if prowling,
in it's hurry to move the sun
to oblivion;
Glowing, tangerine dims to cerise,
colouring mountains, to a purple hue;
Seascapes, changes, from sapphire
to midnight, with a chill;
As if on wings, the dark arrives
like Lucifer, to await
another day.................

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Written August 15th, 2004

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  • cutiepie gold member
    March 28, 2005
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    Thank you for your lovely comments I do appreciate it

  • Tumbleweed
    March 26, 2005
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    Absolutely lovely The imagery is wonderful, you've painted a beautiful scene with your words. I also love the background, it really enhances the overall feel of the poem. Awesome write.

  • cutiepie gold member
    August 15, 2004
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    Glad you liked it , thank you


  • wattle silver member
    August 15, 2004
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    Wow a symbolic Ms Cutie - You paint words, very nice. Thank you


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 15, 2004
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    Thank you, yes I liked the background, great to be able to find something nice for graphics ,Thanks for the comments, it is appreciated


  • Dutch Doll
    August 15, 2004
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    wow, pretty good write, i'd say The back ground matches pretty great, nice, write on!


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 15, 2004
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    Thank you I am pleased you enjoyed it, thank you for your comments, thay are much appreciated

  • cutiepie gold member
    August 15, 2004
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    Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it


  • BlackDressGypsy
    August 15, 2004
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    This is incredible! You talked about dusk in both a physical and emotional way. The imagery is beautiful and the background works really well in getting the message across. Plus I love any poem with the word Lucifer in it.


  • velveteen
    August 15, 2004
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    Oooooh, lovely! This poem was great! I really enjoyed reading it, as I do all of your works.
    "as if on wings the dark arrives
    like Lucifer, to await
    another day................."
    These lines were beautiful! Great write. Keep up the great work!
    God bless you,
    ~~~~~ Crosseyed387 ~~~~~

  • cutiepie gold member
    August 15, 2004
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    I hope you liked it? or were you giving it back to me

  • cutiepie gold member
    August 15, 2004
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    Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it, your comments were much appreciated

  • thehunted
    August 15, 2004
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    I loved the way you created the scene, i could envision everything you wrote and this made the poem beautyful


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 15, 2004
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    To me the world is a beautiful place even though sometimes we forget, but it always there if only we open our eyes, thank you for your very kind comments,Walking in the woods and watching nature breath is beautiful

  • el desdichado
    August 15, 2004
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    Wow, you have amazing diction. I love all the colors you have here...quite a palate. Tangerine...cerise...etc. Beautiful. This is definately a change of pace for me, after reading so much more human-oriented, people-relationship poems. I do love returning to nature. It's therapeutic. I was just walking in the woods a few hours ago...it's so calming. Just being silent for once, and letting the world do the talking. And that's just what you have here.

  • cutiepie gold member
    August 15, 2004
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    Lol Thank you poetbabe glad you liked it

  • cutiepie gold member
    August 15, 2004
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    Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it


  • AzulKatze
    August 15, 2004
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    The structure that surrounds this poem is what makes it, in my opinion. Lovely imagery, and the words just roll off the readers tongue as they pass through it with ease. Lovely write, I must say, and interesting choise of line spacing. Keep on penning on!
    *~!)o(Azul Corte Katze)o(!~*

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