you DNA-d me
and then denied me
I lost my heart inside your eyeballs
no, it's not fucking that makes me
wanna be with you
and it's not jealousy
that paralyzed my senses
I'm sober on the fuddle
in love so much
that feels like dying
I miss you
1000 miles away from you
my sweet Karlsruhe girl
wrecked ego is halfdead hanging
on the body stick
routine is licking my toes
nothingness has reached its top
I still love you
love you even more than ever
fuck poetry
if it's not it
but
it's love
Author notes
Written August 15th, 2004
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I get the feel of it, but I'm not sure I understand many of the metaphors you chose to use. This is obviously an extremely personal piece, and hey... if the feel is there, that's all that matters in my opinion. Imagery was great.
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Wow- way to be rough. The bitter aftertaste of this poem is no more bitter than the truth that you portray in it! The simple ending at the end brings quite an amazing closing to quite an amazing poem. Brutal in it's honesty, words, and form. Loved it! Keep on penning on-
*!~)o(Azul Corte Katze)o(!~*
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