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Night on the Island (Sonnet)

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Length’ning shadows mark day’s beginning end
And silence sweeps across the land and sky
As twilight comes the pale moon now ascends
And night birds start their haunting lullaby

The lifeless leaves hang limply from the trees
The quiet water laps against the shore
What happened to the gentle cooling breeze
Departed now that this brief day is o’er

The sky lights up, a million stars shine out
Amazing us who in the city dwell
A sight that most can only dream about
But those who’ve seen are captured by its spell

A peaceful day becomes a quiet night
As spinning earth now shields us from the light

Author notes

Night on the island was great.  All comments welcomed.
Written August 13th, 2004

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  • Lady Eventide
    October 11, 2007

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    I can never do a sonnet, so it's always good to read someone who has been able to master it. A beautiful piece...the poem creating a more powerful image than the picture, if you ask me. No offense to the picture. Another terrific write from you. Always a pleasure to read.


  • April 1, 2006
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    Oh, now this is a powerful piece, and I've never thought of using the word "powerful" for a sonnet, but your imagery is masterful, and the photo makes it a perfect package. I've seen skies full of stars that light up the night skies in brilliant fashion, but they were in New Mexico and Colorado. These must be the same, only better because they are over water (my essential element). You are truly a gifted wordsmith and poet.


  • Midnight Lace
    June 14, 2005
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    Ohh I love that picture. Its so pretty and love how it blends into the background. And I love the picture you've masterfully painted in my mind. Sucha relaxing and peaceful poem/sonnet this is. Very beautiful Daddy
    Midnight Lace

  • Godwin
    September 17, 2004
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    Though this reader wasn't in the island with you,I can perceive what you experience with the superb description this poem gives - I'm captured by the spell too!You did a grand job here.


  • g r e y i s m
    August 14, 2004
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    nice moon reflection.


  • Darianna
    August 14, 2004
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    I love how peaceful this is. It really sets up the mood as you read the delicious descriptions and images. Wonderful dad, you have done a great job with this!!! HUGS, Dari xxx


  • symitar Moderators member
    August 13, 2004
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    nicely done, Paul. Sonnets can be so lyrical, don't you think? And the picture is perfect for this, I love it. Nice that you share your vacations with us in such a lovely way.

    ~ becky

  • g r e y i s m
    August 13, 2004
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    first..the pic is perfect for the poem..and I love how it fades into the background.
    on to the poem...sonnetry perfection! yes, I admit, I am no expert on sonnets, but I'd like to think I know a good poem when I see one.
    beautiful descriptions throughout...definately painted pictures in my mind of what you were talking about, quite vividly.
    excellent, and my favorite sonnet I've read by you.
    ~ Lea


  • Gatlianne
    August 13, 2004
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    ooo, so dark and mysterious!

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