I am alone inside my head,
Despairing melancholy thoughts,
Words I am sorry to have said.
Tousled, tangled twisted tight knots
Unscrambling, unraveling threads
Into aims of schemes and subplots.
Dreams of delectable sweet coeds,
Fantasy blinding truthfulness
Of aloneness on empty beds.
Remembering my youthfulness,
Glory days forever gone bye,
Now turn to gloomy mournfulness.
Though with much persistence I try,
These terrible thoughts while I’m alone
Will just simply not ever die!
Author notes
What goes on when I'm alone with my thoughts
(experimenting with rhyme schemes lately 
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Written August 13th, 2004
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great write!!!
and thanks for commenting on my poem!!! its appreciated!
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Gotcha.
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It's certainly not my usual write. More dry and melancholy for certain. Each stanza is a different thought so it is also rather disjointed.
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Maybe it’s because I have a ton of things on my mind lately or not, I’m not sure, but this kind of felt a little dry. I read your author’s notes and it shed some light, so maybe it is just because you were in a melancholy mood, as you said. It’s startling to see what we can come up with, when we are left alone in our thought, isn’t it?
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Thanks. I've been in melancholy mood, so my latest posts reflect that. I think they'll awful, but I'm glad to know someone likes them. I have much more positive writings that I like far better than these.
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I liked this a lot, it has wonderful wording and I'm glad I added you to my favourites- you certainly deserve it I loved the wording of this especially the fourth line- I loved its alliteration. Keep up the excellent work
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