Pale is pretty, a beautiful hue
tan is ugly, so fuck you
you're not hot and your not great
you're so ignorant, so you i hate
you said i was your friend, one of the best
dumbass bitch who i fuckin detest
leave me alone, just let me be
i fuckin hate you can't you see
i don't care about your damn life
speak again i'll use the knife!
you say you're punk, you dress to show
you're just another preppy hoe
i don't wanna come over and spend the night
stupid bitch stay outta my sight
so you get straight A's? who gives a fuck
finding you was just my luck
i despise you so much, you don't even know
do i like you? the answer is NO!
you tell me stories, thinking i care
what you don't remember is that i was there
i'm coming for you so you better hide
or i'll have to commit homicide!
Author notes
this is about the same person that i wrote about in my poem \
Written August 13th, 2004
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This is a kick ass poem but you are so mad...? So who is this about? Not to be nosey or anything I'm kind of out of the loop if you know what I mean...talk to ya later...Laura
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Oh the love felt here is deep in the darkness HA HA HAHA
GOOD RELEASE POEM -
Wicked
Bring on the hate A lovely little ode to how someone can get consummed in the valley of hate.You are a very emotional person.It's good you can vent on paper.Else I may have to hide the knives..
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sometimes ya just gotta blow. i do it in my writing... usually. i seldom really blow in real life... more of the catty bitchy type. i guess i prefer long, drawn out torture
i've spent the past couple weeks, maybe months furious as hell at a couple things. i let it out mostly in writing... i thank God i can do that!
this poem is fierce... pure blue rage i call it. it can get you in heaps of trouble if actually acted upon and it's not worth it in the end.
you will find better friends. i'm 49 and have three people, four if i count my husband, whom i consider true friends. been through the bitches, bastards, liars and pricks. i avoid them like the plague now. i learned with age to be choosy and if that makes me overly cautious then so be it. if you make it in, then you're in.
good rant poem. i hope ya feel better. if not, write another and another.... -
woo, go you!! This was totally amazin!!!! loved it...it was....beautiful....((sighs))...lovely....so much pure hatred.......
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Speechless..
Lol that is fucking AWESUM!!!!! 
Love Darkangel
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this was really good fucking awsome..
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that is fuckin awsome.....great job...such hate and anger in u..u remind me of myself..its beautiful...lol...
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Ha ha, I loved this! I know how you feel. I wrote a poem that was defently venting like this one about a guy that I was dating. It's called Retarded Fuckhead if that tells you anything about how I felt about him LOL. Thanks for sharing this, you did a good job on the rhyming. Always keep writing. ~Karli~
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great write!
Hahaha I loved this.
It sounds like something I could write if I got pissed off enough.
I hate people like that, and you just put it in words I never could.
This was an awesome write, keep it up!
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Oh such hate..could feel it burning thru your poem...this is truely a good write..It does the soul good to write your feelings out like this..that being said I ask you to pray to the Goddess for giudiance..so you do not do something stupid like I have done..I hated like this once and did a very evil thing and lost everything I held dear...If you would read two more of my poems "For you my aunt" and "A walk I must take"
Roger Aka DSG -
ya i hope thats true
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Gosh, it's good to give into one of these tirades, eh? lol But seriously, the pure enraged honestly in the piece really hit home, and props to you for being able to express it so succinctly. Seriously, I do wish you well in being able to find less offensive friends, lol, for they are out there, even though you might have to go through bushels of rotten apples to find a good one, lol. But as for this, I have to say I was impressed with your imagery and energy. Great job.
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exellent
woah.. thats pretty hard. thats probably one of the angriest poems i have ever read. Though from one naturally pale girl to another, Great job!
Jaguaria -
kix big cow ass
that is so.........fucking...............AWESOME! such rage and shit. such compassion in getting this person away from you. thats how i feel about a lot of people. great job! i love your work so far even though this is the only one ive read.
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oo i like this. it reminds me of my "friend" i despise her so much.... thanks for writing something like this!! its really good!
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there i fixed the grammar...happy now?
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thank you for thinking its cheesy.......
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Wow thats definatly alot of anger there. lol. Writing about it though will keep ya from doing any thing cause i doubt you want to get in trouble
You're a very talented writer thuogh. Your whole piece rhymed and kinda felt like a freestyle. Good write and keep up the awsome work.
Jason
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