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Empty

I'm empty in my thoughts tonight
I'm empty in my dreams
I'm empty from all the fighting
I'm empty from reality
I'm empty from our life together
I'm empty in my heart
I'm empty from head to toe
I'm empty in my brain
I'm empty in my soul
I'm empty within
I'm empty because of you

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Written August 13th, 2004

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  • Jasmine Rayne
    August 22, 2008

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    I like this. It's very passionate and moody. The repetition of "I'm empty" adds to the hopeless feeling of the poem.

    "I'm empty because of you"

    Very powerful ending. Love it. :]






    -Lily♥