Fading Friends……Wyleian Sonnet VI.
I’ve covered many miles of life's rough road
and on the way have picked up many friends
who, keeping with me through the straights or bends,
the uphill climbs and level stretches strode.
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But as the shadows of my days grow long
I look behind and, with amazement, stay
to see how many friends along the way
have fallen back, then ceased to sing their song.
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As year by year the group around me wanes
and, more and more their funerals I attend,
less greeting but more sympathy cards send,
death-anniversaries bring frequent pains.
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And when at last someone engraves my stone
will I face Death's long highway all alone?
Hugh Wyles, August 12th.2004
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Thanks to Gen for the background for this sonnet and for the idea behind it.
Written August 12th, 2004
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Dear David,
Thanks for your comment. I've changed one line - is that enough? Regards, Hugh. -
the sentiment is good but I am not sure if the word choices are consistent through the lines. There may be a few that need to be looked at to make the thing run a little smoother
david -
Now, despite your wondering - which may be understandable - you couldn't possibly believe that you will be able to sneak away without the tearful goodbyes of all those you've extended your heart to help.
Besides, I think everyone else is just checking out first, so they have you there to say such touching things about them when they go. (Perhaps you should do a lousy job next time. That way, everyone won't be just dying to have you eulogize them). lol -
OH, this was truly awesome. IT left a painful emptiness in my heart at the end. Can't imagine you gone my friend. Although none of us are promised tomorrow, it is still a sad moment to think about.
I love your work, never a disappointment.
Sam
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Thanks everyone for your friendly comments. My thought was, after attending yet another friend's funeral, that there'll be nobody left to attend my funeral and see me on my way. Of course I don't intend to set out on that last journey for a long time yet.
Love and hugs to you all XXX Hugh.
Edited on Aug 14, 4:35 because 'lost my hat !'. -
You are the King of the Sonnets.This is a thought that sometimes crosses my mind too. Like others before me have said I can't see you walking that road alone.My thoughts try to stay on that wonderful Savior that I will meet.
Jacki
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Hugh my dear friend, I think you have created a wonderful Sonnet
and like the others say, you're not going anywhere, and when you do you won't be alone, you'll have a lot of family and friends waiting there to greet you and what a bang up celebration that is going to be~love to you my friend~Joan~
I applaud you
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Beautiful but sad sonnet
I am like Catz hope your not planning to skip out on us soon. we would just come get and preseve you LOL
I do think its nostalgic and melancholy & like Mariza said you will be in the most brightest light penning away sonnets even then
I too like her want to say
Shake shake those sad thoughts away
Thanks for the e mail I love it and laughed
Send more and I got some new ones up
Love n hugs my friend
Will catch up on others soon
Love ya
Susan~~~
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A sad thought in this sonnet. You, my dear friend, will not be alone on the last long road. If not in company of people who love you, then will be in company of the spirits of light.
Shake those sad thoughts away!
Kisses and loves,
Mari
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Wow, Hugh, not planing to skip out on us anytime soon are you? ....not that we'd let you get away with that.
Actually, this is a good piece, in my humble opinion. It talks sort of a cross between matter-of-fact and melencholy.
It's a very thoughtful and thought provoking poem. I do like it and can certainly understand where you're coming from
luv and
Dee
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Hugh -
This looks good. I like the final revisions you did to this and yeah, I like the way this background fits. I think it very much reflects especially the second stanza, with the reminisence.
Now off to take a look at VII.
Your Forever Gen.
Edited on Aug 12, 6:44 p.m. because 'brain not yet awake....'.
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