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Henry

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Alone he sits and waits;
Adjusting himself to the harshness
of the ground, he preens, checking
for visitors;

Catching the scent on the breeze
stretches languorously; Cats
eyes pierce the silence; Nose
sniffing appreciatively.

Tail dancing as if it were charming
a snake or hypnotising his pray,
he cavorts with some unseen
friend or foe.. maybe a leaf.

Stalking, a bird who has
dared to venture into his space;
He charges at his foe with eyes flashing
and teeth, razor sharp.

The comical look upon his face,
when getting to the spot, to find the
enemy has retreated into the tree
far from his reach, or has it?

Circling the tree, he looks for vantage points
to unseat the foe and capture; Claws unsheathed,
starts the slow stealth approach with tail,
acting as a balance iron-rod in appearance.

His summit in sight, he lunges screaming abuse
at the unfortunate bird, who does no more than
to float on the breeze out of reach;
Tantalizing.. disdain upon his face.

Realising the predicament, the hunter
grips the branch and tries to turn;
Was this branch this high up?
Why am I getting dizzy? where is my MUM!?

Mum, sits preening herself watching
her great little man exploring the
garden and all it holds; Smiling,
purring gently.. suddenly a yell;

Dinner! cats of each and every colour
arrive to lunch, squabbling and swiping
at each other in the time honoured way;
But, what of the kitten?

The little hunter of the garden,
was dusting off himself, after his mighty
trapeze stunt that landed him,
into the wheelbarrow of collected leaves.

"Come along Henry, time for lunch
and a snooze", so off he went, tail
upright.. as in the manner of all
great hunters.......

Author notes

"HAPPY 29 AGAIN Rebeka!"
Written August 12th, 2004

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  • cutiepie gold member
    July 11, 2005
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    Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it


  • rebeka
    July 11, 2005
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    awww.Henry sounds like a cool cat for sure! thank you for entering this contest, your poem is very good.

  • PandaBaby
    October 5, 2004
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    Henry sounds like a very comical pet. I love that line

    "friend or foe, maybe a leaf"

    Sounds exactly like my dog Susie, although she's too lazy she just barks. She doesn't care what it actually is. She just barks in case it's something that should worry her
    I see my friend queencroutonian has already mention this. Ah, well... Anyway, great write Thank you for entering and good luck my contest

    ~


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 3, 2004
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    Thank you Henry is a favourite of mine, he is always in trouble


  • inyourbloodstream
    October 3, 2004
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    lol. Funny
    "friend or foe, maybe a leaf"
    reminds me of Susie! Nice write and good luck in the ocntest.


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 18, 2004
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    Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it


  • YouFailMe
    August 18, 2004
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    this is so cute...u did such a great job with this...great job and good luck


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 13, 2004
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    Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it


  • Xx Alice xX
    August 12, 2004
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    You have captured the life of a cat so well. This is an adorable write, so well penned. It's just so sweet. well done.


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 12, 2004
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    You are most welcome

  • pozo
    August 12, 2004
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    I like this poem a lot- it was so sweet and reminded me a bit of my cat (although I don't think he'll like being called a kitten He's 4). Thanks for this entry


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 12, 2004
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    Thank you A Pet is a must I am glad you enjoyed the poem thanks for the comments


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 12, 2004
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    I am glad you enjoyed it Thank you


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 12, 2004
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    They are so funny when they are into everything, I am glad you enjoyed it


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 12, 2004
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    Thanks I am glad you enjoyed it


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 12, 2004
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    thank you I am glad you enjoyed it

  • el desdichado
    August 12, 2004
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    hmmm, an altogether charming and playful poem. well done. i like the description very much because of its candidness. it's as if you captured a cat on candid camera. i've never had a pet of my own, and this just adds to my envy.


  • -theheartofme-
    August 12, 2004
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    i have often wished i could capture the playfulness of a kitten and instill it into my heart.. i really like this..it is whimsicle and light..(and i cant spell)

  • SpeedyII
    August 12, 2004
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    How fitting, I have a three-month-old kitten named Henry!

    I agree with everyone else - very cute. My Henry likes to put all four of his feet in the water bowl and eat out of the dog food at the same time, BTW *shrug*


  • August 12, 2004
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    good work

    poem was really cute. liked it


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 12, 2004
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    Thank you


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 12, 2004
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    thank you I am glad you enjoyed it


  • Novae
    August 12, 2004
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    Funny!

    Adorable! ^^ A cute lil kitty getting its dinner, and the ending was excellent!! So kawaii! Nice write!


  • strangerideas
    August 12, 2004
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    Very cute poem. Reminded me of Milo and Otis.


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 12, 2004
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    Thank you

  • tickle fairy
    August 12, 2004
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    lol, cute! I like the way you gave the cats personality, interesting ideas.

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