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Special Delivery

There's a little bundle on the doorstep,
the stork helped bring it on his way,
wrapped in a soft pale blue blanket,
you have a special delivery for today.

We had better bring it in the house,
the bundles has started moving around,
and I keep hearing funny little noises,
sounds like a goo-goo,da-da sound.

Let's hurry and open up the blanket,
my goodness what do we have here,
wow it's the cutest little baby boy,
look his bottom is completely bare.

Wow doesn't  he looks just like me,
he has brown hair and eyes of blue,
he has cute dimples on his cheeks
he smiled, now he looks like you.

The good Lord sent this sweet blessing,  
to mommy and daddy from Heaven above,
the stork flew down to our doorstep,
we will hold him and give him our love.  

You are our first precious newborn baby,
we will always protect you from all harm,
you will always feel safe and loved,
as you snuggle each night in our arms.







 

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Written August 12th, 2004

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  • oikevois baby silver member
    May 12

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    i love cuddling with my brothers on the couch and just stroking their hair. a touching moment penned in to a great poem. well done

    Mylee

  • Sandygram silver member
    August 18, 2004
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    Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I appreciate it. I welcome your advice about counting the syllables. I only started writing any poetry in June. I waited 60 years to start so I have alot to learn. I usually write from my heart or memory, which is not as it was in younger years . Should each line have the same amount of sllables? Well take care, Sandy
    Edited on Aug 18, 12:01 because ''.

  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    August 18, 2004
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    Very cute!! I liked the concept:

    A critical review is invited

    Only suggestion I would have is that the syllables be counted more even for the sake of flow. Otherwise, the presentation is darling.

    Thank you for sharing! Warmly, CookieZeal
  • Seraph1885
    August 15, 2004
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    poor babies tushie was bare A very cute poem indeed... I love the rhyme ^.^ ya know the forth stanza is almost the same thing my aunt and uncle were doing and to stop them from fighting i told them he looks like me just tanner anyway, thanks for entering
    Love
    Seraph
  • Ladybug1962
    August 15, 2004
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    good job

    I loved everything about this poem. The rhyme, the way you set it up and the background. Good job!

  • Hoosierpoet silver member
    August 14, 2004
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    Delightful - children's poems and poems about children and babies are my greatest weakness. Good job.

    Best wishes,
    Moses

  • Love My US Marine
    August 14, 2004
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    Oh that was so adorable. I love babies! Maybe it's cos I don't have my own, lol, just kidding. Great poem, It shows the joy of a new baby.

    ~shari~

  • Ember Rose
    August 14, 2004
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    This is the second poem that I really enjoyed about a newborn...lol. Like the wit and humor here as well!!! The title with your site id was a catchy one and I just had to read this. Since you only have one other who seems to have commented, I will promote this for you as I do have a few spare points. Rose
  • pozo
    August 12, 2004
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    Aww, such a cute poem! I liked this one a lot- good luck in the contest Thanks for commenting on my poem
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