“I’ve found her.
Come here and see if we can do something for her.”
There’s nothing you can do for her.
Face down in the bath tub
in a pool of blood.
It’s too late for her.
“We saw her.
She was talking to a man in a bar.”
But did he do it?
Strangle,
beat and abuse her.
Is it too late for him?
“I did it.
It was me. Me. Me.”
I’ve been her neighbour eleven years.
I know everything about the case
Everything about her –
Intimately.
“It’s not you.
You are obsessive-compulsive.”
But it was me.
Or was it?
But it was me.
Or was it?
The evidence doesn’t fit.
But I say I did it.
Or did I?
It was me.
Or was it?
Author notes
Written August 11th, 2004
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It was intreging.(sorry if thats spelled wrong) It seems like it belongs a suspense novel if that makes sense. It was really good and I like how it was worded. The questioning definatly makes you wonder whats right...kind of like making the reader question this person as well. Ok I hope that made any sense. I did enjoy reading this.
TroubledAngel -
I liked this, Or did I? lol yes this is very thought provoking. It reads like a movie about a murder, were the killer knows exactly how to get away with it. gave me chills awsome.
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heya,
OMG i loved the way this poem was gonna end...it was really good! U have so much talent! it was beautifuly written! I can't wait 2 see more of ur stuff! i just loved reading this. I hope theres more just like it. It kinda makes u wonder...you let peoples minds LINGER on fact -n- fiction. You also made us choose 4 ourself who ACTUALLY did it. It totally rocked!
Chloe Michele
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wow... i like this! it makes you wonder what really happened. good job!
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I love the questioning in the poem. It really shows the emotions and mental struggles this person is going through. Also love how you never really explained what happened to the girl in the bath tub... it makes u think. Great job! **hastings**
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YAY! I like it
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