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I was on my way

I had a dream I woke up in his arms
I felt so safe so far from harm
When I finally awoke from this dream
The strangest thing was happening to me
I awoke to a bright light shining in my eyes
I was so disoriented, trying to figure out why
Surrounded by nurses and doctors
Next to me was a bouquet of flowers
They told me I had been there for weeks,
In a coma, a long deep sleep
Why did you save me? I need to go
Don't you understand? I have nothing else to live for
My husband died some years back
To this day I can't get my life on track
He talks to me sometimes at night
This morning I was going towards the light
Doctor do you know what you did today?
You held me back, I was on my way

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Written August 11th, 2004

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  • sporadicwrites
    August 17, 2004
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    Diamond, Your giving me a big head. lol. I have all these ideas coming to me now. Hopefully you will enjoy whats to come. Thanks for stopping by,
    Dee

  • sporadicwrites
    August 17, 2004
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    Thank you so much TinyDancer. Maybe I will promote this poem, I did'nt understand how to do it before but someone showed me. Thanks for reading and leaving your comment.
    Dee


  • Diamond
    August 12, 2004
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    Awesome Read

    Great write Dee, you're just to young, gifted and talented to be on your way. If anything, you're on your way to the top. Your talent is beyond my imagination. Keep on writing and giving us all something to think about and relish in.

    All my best to you,

    Avril

  • TinyDancer
    August 11, 2004
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    O wow. I loved the rhyme. Sometimes poems need to rhyme and I thought this was one of those poems. But whoa, the story. You need to promote this because I think it deserves to be read. Maybe those people could express how Im feeling right now because Im just at a lost for words. Great job!