Transparent, gossamer, drifting
betwixt rose and carnations;
Multicoloured segments, emerald,
scarlet and black.
Floating on currents,
too fine to see; Drifting
carelessly, as a ghostly
apparition, darting.
Wings enclose, softly
cocooning, hiding from
sight, this gentle creature;
Fragile, yet beautiful.
Emerged, from a ugliness
and evolved; Stately delicate,
as a whisper,
on the breeze.
Author notes
I saw this creature on a rose,amazing how fragile they are
Written August 10th, 2004
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very lovely
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Thank you Candy
Glad you enjoyed it 
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Just beautiful!!!
I just adore this piece. Lovely imagery!
This is my favorite stanza~~~
Transparent, gossamer, drifting
betwixt rose and carnations;
Multicoloured segments, emerald,
scarlet and black.
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Thank you
This was one of my earlier offerings...sometimes when re-reading I think I should delete, then I get lovely comments from people like yourself and re-access 
Thank you for taking the time and for the comment
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Yes it is sad what some people think is beautiful, Entombing butterflies and moths always makes me feel as if it like onwing a trophy, where you see lion and buffalo heads mounted on walls
such a waste , thank you for your kind words and also fo reading so many of my poems, I do appreciate the time it takes 
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I love butterflies, always have; and your poem evokes so many memories for me. Interesting how when you find a bit of writing as this it seems to trigger images deep in the soul. I guess that’s what makes poetry good and good poetry great. When I was little, a neighbor found out about my keen interest in butterflies. So he came over, one day, with a big wooden box under his arm and said “do you want to see my butterflies?” I was ecstatic and could hardly contain my excitement. I said I did. When he opened the hinged box, I looked up, toward the ceiling expecting to see the butterflies above me. Straining my eyes to see, i saw that there weren’t any flying around. That’s odd I thought, maybe they’re just shy so I looked inside the box. What I saw horrified me. Ten to twenty butterflies were encased in glass boxes all dried out with pins stuck in them. “How could any one be so cruel!” I screamed. My dad boxed my ears and my mom yelled at me for being so rude and ill mannered I was heart broken...I remember my thoughts to this day; “ butterflies are for living and flying, not torture and glass tombs”. I’ll have to write a poem someday about that.
Blessings and best wishes to you
~richard
oh, and i thank you for offering your hand in friendship, it is an awesome gift i will always treasure.
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Thank you
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i like your description of the butterfly, but better yet the illusion behind it all is the transforming from one life to the other. a reverse transformation maybe? good eye opener
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Very effective imagery. I love the words you chose to describe the butterfly. Very eloquently written.
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Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it
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excellent!
Very beautiful write!
You captured the image and vision of a butterfly in these words!
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it
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Lol Freda you have some choice sayings
well I am really glad you like my "Stuff" Thanks for your kind words
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Thank you I am glad you found pleasure in this poem
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Very nice descriptions, I like the thoughts on this one alot. And it came from a natural inspiration! Very nice!
In power and honor,
-Everyones Dead -
cp, the more I read of your work the better I like your stuff...and of course this piece should not be called stuff it ia transparent image of serene beauty in words you have done well freda
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Excellent
Very well stated. I just came in from the garden and saw many butterflies ,Well expressed a nice picture in words -
How beautiful! I love it... You write SO well. The smallest thing can inspire such a beautiful write out of you. It's great... Enjoyed this thoroughly
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No I didn't know, but It is a beautiful thought, Thank you for your kind words and support They are so appreciated
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You are probably right, I am inclined to stop writing as I finish a description incase I spoil it with mumbo jumbo Thank you for you very kind words through they are appreciated
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You've been to my pages recently...so you KNOW I love flutterbyes...a LOT...are you aware that the Native Americans believe that butterflies carry the newly deceased Spirit to Heaven? It does make sense...& is a very lovely thought, as well...I especially liked the last stanza...the whole poem...but the last one in particular.....Great write, Poet!!! & Keen observational skills, as well... ...Wanda
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Nicely said Wildman and I agree, Thanks for the words, they are much appreciated
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Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it
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Thank you Black Lace, I am glad you enjoyed it
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The first thing I noticed about this poem was its great rhythm, and its beautiful structure. the first stanza really blew me away. it is really very well-written. very nice diction. but i wonder if there is anything else to it that you meant to say, besides simply describing a butterfly. i'm not saying that there's anything wrong with a simple description, because here, you craft a very complex and interesting one. however, i didn't really feel like the rest of the poem really supported the idea you presented at the end.
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The intricate beauty of the butterfly is only rivaled by it's diversity... hundreds af species world-wide - each flmaboyant it their perfect - minute picassos' in their own right. You gotta luv 'em..! Fun, light-heated musings..
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How nice!!
Such a beautiful read , thank you for featuring it, I love the way you wrote your poem off of an image you saw and captured the imagry really well, lovely write
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What a life a butterfly has, drifting from flower to flower, and the flying. I dream of flying, more like a butterfly's float. And all of the beautiful flowers they see. They are drawn to bright colors. wonderful poem, very beautiful.
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Lol, yes in spirit and mind I am glad you enjoyed this, thank you for your kind words
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You said you were butterflyish, perhaps inspiration for this work? Well, whatever your inspiration was, this poem was beautiful! I really enjoyed reading it!
God bless you,
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Crosseyed387 ~~~~~
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