Wondrous beauty
Masked by the finest silk
Although, it is quite misunderstood
Could..of course..be jealousy
Snow white
A sick, malnourished child
Small, yet so immense
May fade away with time..
Clones surround
Yet a shade of light pink
Rosy cheeks
Or a dainty nail polish
A valuable element of life
Singed away..set apart
The black sheep of the crowd
I still love you
So sad to see so many give up
Nerves take part in mass suicide
Flesh cells caught in genocide
You're mutilated..but still so attractive
Author notes
I hope this one fits! It took me hours.
I took something simple and made it way too deep
The answer is in the poem..you just have to think to find it..if you really cant figure it out then ask me
enjoy..
Written August 9th, 2004
A contest entry
- Isnt that a bit too deep? by Tsubasa.
432 points, ended August 17, 2004, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Great Job! yu use so many big words! lol thats cool lol
-i am hated
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beautiful I enjoyed it
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GREAT job.. i love it ALOT..
~Sara~ -
This one was particulairy good and definitly caught my eye. This is a beautiful wirte.
Keep Writing.
Dara -
Excellent
I think I know, but does it really matter? It is beautiful and complex, good luck in the contest
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Ok, Ill bite... I loved reading it for the imagery in but I am lost as far as the meaning goes... help me....lol
-Joseph -
very deep, but seing the contest... anyway very nice
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*coughs* I have no clue what this is about.... a guy? nail polish?....... lol. That's exactly what I want though!! Plus the way you wrote it was so vivid and amazing. It's so deep, exactly what I wanted. I'll try to figure out what it means.
This was amazing, good skills in the contest.
~Peace~
Braveheart -
Wow, this is really deep..I think I may have guessed the uh..theme? But the point is that it's very beautiful and vivid. Great job!
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yeah, i know u wrote some new ones, ill get around to reading them tomorrow or the next day, im beat.
thanks for the comment!
--cole xoxo -
wow... as always
wow.. it is good! i'm amazed! it's deep and the simnple topic behind it makes it perfect! i wish you all the luck in the contest! oh, and my favorite stanza was the last one:
So sad to see so many give up
Nerves take part in mass suicide
Flesh cells caught in genocide
You're mutilated..but still so attractive
anyways, i've written new poems
lol. so... ttyl.
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yea... i dont get it lol
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thanks
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this is really good... it certainly makes you think... I had to reread it! but its awesome nonetheless,
~*~Ashley~*~
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