One day, I will break the bars
& this steel cage will bend in defeat
To my unfathomable determination
The silent resentment
When virtuous inside abandons endurance
will ignite & set aflame
the volcano lying dormant inside me
& for every storm obstructing my way
I will be immune
One day, I will fly & soar into the
Endless blue with resurgent freedom
Surpassing all the horizons
A caged bird solemnly promises to itself
And the bird inside me will never die
It’s passion never will subside
& the rising rebellion within
Breaking all the chains of limitations,
desperations, rebukes & fulmination
Revolting against all the prejudices & odds
I will reach my zenith
And unveil the ‘rebel bird’ inside me.
Author notes
My motto is to reach my aim no matter how many hardships come my way.
Written August 9th, 2004
A contest entry
- Quotes and Mottos by PoetGirlRavioli.
300 points, ended August 12, 2004, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A Birds's rebellion by Apurva's poem good example of poetic feelings about herself and not lossing her passion of life. -
An uplifting write that reinforces the spark of determination and the instinct to survive that is innate in all of us. Krishna
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Great content. And I agree with what you said in the cover page about transcending religion, creeds, and even a limited idea of patriotism. Human expressions should pursue freedom not chains.
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You have done an excellent job here Apruva. I love this!! I love the comparison between a bird in a cage and the obstacles we, as people, face every day, that try to chain us down, pin us in and basically defeat us. This is really impressive! You have my applaud for sure.
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Its a expression of energies.
A Birds's rebellion by Apurva is successful poem declaring volcano inside the body which is coming up to burst. It happend to such persons in their life. She was perfect to attract readers feelings with per poem. That's the beauty of A birds's rebellion.
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Awesome job here! Thanks so much for entering this into my contest. I also love the theme of the "caged bird". Great job here! Thanks again!
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A wonderful write with great use of extended metaphor, I love the theme of the 'caged bird'. Keep up the good work because this was great
Thanks for commenting on my poem
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Excellant, I truly enjoyed this poem and in fact sent it to a friend of mine to read. I applaud your analogies and word usage as well as the cleverly hidden ryhme, Superb Job,
Chandal -
Exceptional and lovely
We all have that rebellion inside us desiring to be set free. We want to get out of our shell of shyness, fear and inhibition.
This is a desire hidden in every human being and you have versed it beautifully with wonderous words that ring in our ears again and again, reflecting the caged bird within us.
Just a humble suggestion though. Never use symbols like "&" in poems. Otherwise a beauty and good luck in the contest.
Love from India - Joel - -
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well.. your motto is quite understandable... your poem too is a nice one... it is easily understandable... your selection of proper words makes it better and interesting to read.... take cares and have a nice time .... just keep it up aditi/apurva... your humble little friend....
... .... - vic
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wow-n wishing u all the best in reaching your zenith -I have loved this poem
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