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Intimacy

Touch me.
Touch my skin
Let me feel warmth within
Let me feel hands, face, and all.
Let me feel the warmth of your body
Touching mine.

Touch me.
Not my skin.
No, much deeper within.
Touch me on the inside.
Hear me think. Feel what I feel.
Touch my heart.

Touch me.
Not my heart.
That is only the start.
Know the real me.
Who I am. Who I will be
The one I don’t even see.
Touch my soul.

Author notes

What we long for...
Written August 9th, 2004

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  • PurpleSky
    August 25, 2004
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    hmmmm well although you hated the rules you still folowed them so thank you now on with the show lol. I love this poem for the statement it makes about loving somone for who they are on the inside as it can be the only pure kind of love. I enjoyed reading your heart here and thank you for entering and following those rules lol

  • PurpleSky
    August 15, 2004
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    I have read this and I thank you for entering. If all rules have been followed I will be commenting after the contest has closed. So just in general I am asking everyone to just take a quick look again and make sure the rules are followed. good luck!


  • melphleg gold member
    August 11, 2004
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    You are too kind. Thank you. I still need to learn to boil an egg though


  • Touchof1der silver member
    August 11, 2004
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    Something of this caliber and depth could only come from your pen melphleg. This is exquisite. Very simply stated but with such depth of thought. A wonderful job my friend! Good luck in the contest.


  • Gaffer
    August 11, 2004
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    I really like the progression and consistency of this poem. You tie all the stanzas together; I love seeing structural elements in poetry. A really cool poem.


  • Overly Analytical
    August 10, 2004
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    This is really interesting... awesome write! I like how you wanted to go deeper, farther than the heart and all the way to the soul. This is a very emotional and open poem, keep writing!
    ~dani~


  • Sandygram
    August 9, 2004
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    A Beautiful Poem

    This is an awesome poem. It is wonderful when a person wants to know you completely and actualy takes the time to do it. I enjoyed reading it. WONDERFUL POEM

  • Alluvia13
    August 9, 2004
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    Amazing

    I think this is an incredible poem! It gave me chills... literally. I love the way it expresses the idea of letting someone know you. Beautiful.


  • melphleg gold member
    August 9, 2004
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    Honestly, I think your comments Artis are better than the poem.


  • artis
    August 9, 2004
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    to be his puppet, and allow him to let you dance on the splendour of his touch, and allow him into the depths of yourself, your soul, and bend you gently to all that you wish he would take you to, love this poem...Artis

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