Sinister threats of quietude,
Surreptitious conspiracy of fate,
A rendezvous of brittle moments
and my stagnant mind,
Instincts forsaken,
In taint of unbridled
thoughts of loosing you…
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Written August 9th, 2004
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beautifuly Sad
well u do have a knack of saying things within a few words
and i really like the way u have expressed ur self ,specially when u use such kind of words as it says a lot .Our mind is so complex sometime simple words can not express them properly good work again
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Moment to moment awareness is great.
Insecure poem by Apurva is awareness with herself and expression of her unique feelings of timebeing when she felt something wrong in her percetion of life. In this way, Insecure have been invented to the world. Anyway, she never failure to be aware. -
is nice and a bit abstract as well..though in the last line, the word loosing should actually be losing, in this case.
thanks for reading and commenting on my poem..
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May you never lose him a most wonderful write- very relating
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Exquisite
Doubts, doubts, always doubts in love, but why? We need to have belief in us, trust in what we want and what we can get.
Love is no different. True love from the depth of the heart is always returned. Some times it takes time is all.
Nicely worded, little girl. You sure play with words and words play symphony in you quill.
Love from India - Joel - -
I liked this poem a lot, it was beautifully worded. I felt it was quite a painful and sad read verging on darkness but with a lot of emotion. A great write which I liked a lot: keep up the good work
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