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My King

Honour me, Love me,

 

Treat me like a "Queen".

 

 

and..

 

 

I'll make sure that you

 

become my "King".

 

 

Kiss me, Hold me, Make love

 

to me as we do in your

 

dreams.

 

 

and..

 

 

I'll make sure that your

 

dreams never a part from

 

me.

 

 

Respect me, Trust me, and

 

Hold me dear to your Heart.

 

 

Because..

 

 

We are two spirits that will

 

never part.

 

 

Yvonne Griffin

 

6/12/02

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Oh damn these daydreams. They sometimes get the best of me.
Written June 12th, 2002

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  • Rubee
    June 29, 2002
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    excellent

    I LOVE this piece!! Very well expressed Yvonne!! This is how two people who love each other should be...excellent!!


  • illustriousbuddha
    June 12, 2002
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    neutral

    i liked the sentiment
    but, {even though it is not easy to say, i will be honest, since you are requesting critical comments} i felt that
    this poem covers familiar ground in a familiar way:
    be my king i'll be your queen
    hold me dear to your heart
    spirits that will never part

    ~these are borrowed,
    all well-worn,
    did nothing i haven't seen before

  • pruedence
    June 12, 2002
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    neutral

    dreams are what keep us all going..never stop the dreams..thank you for sharing, very nice!


  • Dreamweaver silver member
    June 12, 2002
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    excellent

    Yvonne .... Never stop dreaming .... Otherwise I will be out of a job!

    Hugs
    Sammy

  • soulful
    June 12, 2002
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    excellent

    daydreams are fun tho..nicely done

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