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11:17

11:17 middle of the morning
"How was your night?"
"Oh it was fine."
I smile.
She has no idea.

Author notes

This really happened with one of my co-workers the morning after one of the best nights my ex and I ever shared.
Written December 15th, 2003

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  • el desdichado
    August 10, 2004
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    hmmm, this is an interesting one. i like this poem quite a bit, actually. it has a sly kind of charm that really fits its subject matter. and i like the specifity of the time...11:17. nice work.