Peppered thoughts, dancing
around my mind, leaping and clamouring
for attention;
Jostling, for prime place,
in the rush to excel.
Cascades of colour, mixing and painting
wondrous sequences, in my
mind's eye; Exulting the
thoughts, into neat arrangements,
of fact and fiction.
Resulting in exhaustion
and elation.
Author notes
This is how I feel when trying to write
Written August 8th, 2004
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excellent
I can so relate to this still I could not have said it better!
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wow!
lemme catch my breath now..
so much going on inside your brain. brilliant.
this poem contained so much energy. It made me feel like I was having a workout. lol! the part where the paints come in had me imagining real drops of paint jumping up and down.
the last line was fantastic. Summed up the whole poem beautifully.
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Well, I suppose it is rather like a workout
I know I feel exhausted by the time I have all the eye's and tee's crossed 
Glad you enjoyed, you must have dug deeply to find this one 
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Loved the metaphors here,
you captivate the readers with them perfectly!
I guess I'm a big fan of yours, can ya tell!
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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So beautiful, you have penned an awesome right here. So full of expression. I really like it, thanks for sharing!!
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Thank you for your kindness
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ah...it must be my "butterflyishness" 
(I think I have just invented a new word 
lol Glad you enjoyed 
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So full of images of things going bump in the night - here, there and everywhere. Liked the way you put this together.
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Great job! It was very thought invoking! I loved the free flow to it. Really excellent. I also loved all the big words! Hee hee, I love people with a big vocabulary. Great write! Keep up the great work, and thank you for commenting on my poem, The Mirage!
God bless you,
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Crosseyed387 ~~~~~
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Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it
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Very nice, I too like very much the way you've given thoughts life and colour to complete the picture.
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Thank you I am honoured
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Yes when all the words vie for attention it can be hard, thank you for your kind words
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Thank you,you are very kind I am glad you enjoyed the poem
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Thank you for your kind words
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed this poem
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Awesome
Very beautiful imagery and an awesome short, sweet write. I liked it a lot. Keep up the good work! I think I've seen maybe 5 of your poems ... wow....
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excellent write! i liked it a lot... that's how i feel when i write too... so many great lines and thoughts come into my head, all trying to fit together like a giant puzzle. great job
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BRAVO! *stands and applauds* There is so much expression in your words...I can totally relate to this piece; I think a lot of people on this site can, though few of us can put these feelings into words as well as you do! My favorite line is 'cascades of colour mixing and painting wonderous sequences in my mind's eye' Excellent job!
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A poets mind... Who dares go there?
You have done a great job of describing the moment when words want to express themselves they flood onto the paper or screen.
'jostling for prime place,in the rush to excel' Awesome description. Totally relate to this. This is very well written. Well Done. -
Thank you should I take that as a complement?lol, well I will so thanks again and I am glad you enjoyed it
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Glad you enjoyed it Gaffer, thank you
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Thank you Wendy, I am always pleased to get such positive feedback
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Thank you Moses, I am glad it pleased you
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Lol sunrise you make me sound like a poem factory ( perhaps I am )Thank you for your ongoing support it is much appreciated
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Thanks Jenp It is much appreciated
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I liked this because this is how I write. Uhmmmm or it could be a flash back to the 70's......doesn't matter it still was a good write.
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed .
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I am glad you enjoyed this one It is so encouraging when one sees that understanding is apparent in what one writes, I sometimes wonder if it is just me that can see what I am trying to say , so thank you
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Really cute piece. Nice use of internal rhyming and alliteration. Really nice imagery achieved in a short poem. All in all, makes me feel light and fluffy.
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This makes me feel like i've been "thinking" way too much...like my thoughts are spinning out of control...lol
I like this, its simplistic, yet complicated. A strong write, very well done.
Enjoyed,
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Yep - this is an apt description of what goes on in my mind when I attempt to write a poem! At first there is this jumble of words and phrases that don't make much sense, then as I rearrange them into a sensible order, something akin to a poem takes shape! (LOL) Good descriptive poem.
Best wishes,
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YEY!so inspiring and so good,very detialed poem,great job!cant wait to see what you flip out next!seems like you put your whole heart into this
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I know exactly what you mean here! Me too when I'm not sure where I'm going with something. I wrote something similar to this the other day.
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wonderfully written. I love the first 2 lines they describe everything a poet goes through. Short but sweet. Well done. ^_^
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Splendid
This is beautiful-- you've described the inner workings of a poet's mind just splendidly!!! I can totally relate! keep up the good work, friend... I shall be reading more... ~penumbrapoet
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Thank you Pierre, I am glad you enjoyed this view of collected or not collect thoughts
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I am glad you enjoyed this, I am sure many of us folk at AP feel this way when trying to sort out the mess we call a brain Thank you for tyour comments
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excellent!
Wonderfully spoken!
This is an interesting thought on casual thoughts that float through the mind, like a dream. Maybe a daydream about different things? Nicely done! -
This is great! I love the lines "Peppered thoughts dancing / around my mind leaping and clamouring / for attention." Like many AP postings, it reminds me of a line from an Ani Difranco song "Every Angle" - "Thoughts of you are picketing my brain / They refuse / to work such long hours without rest / in unstable conditions at best"
Great write!
~Elsie
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