Many years, have passed in quiet
remembrance;
Memories of love, taken and given, with
hope.
Silences, filled with despair and
misgivings;
Ever hopeful, for a
return performance, an encore;
Not to be.
Leaving, is not such sweet parting;
The void that remained, unbearable;
Emptiness, engulfs everything,
relentlessly.
Whispers forever, forgotten goodbye's;
whilst hurt, whispers back
adieu.
Author notes
Regrets surface in calmer moments, hence the need to \
Written August 8th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Goodbyes by l-u-b-y-l-o-o.
300 points, ended August 14, 2004, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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AMAZING
wow this was so amazing, it was deep and thought provoking, I loved it... I loved how you drew me into the poem, it made me forget about the fact that I am at a computer all I could think about was this poem and the beautiful words you wrote... you are an amazing poet, and your poem is really great... I honestly was moved by this, keep up the amazing and great writing, you are obviously extremely talented at it.
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Perhaps it is just the way my mind works?...lol. Many thanks for your comments, they are appreciated
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Hmm..I don't know what to say. Im...well..speechless. This one is different for me..great but different. I still enjoyed though. Your words are so subtle..how do you do it? good write keep up the great work
lots of love
maryj -
Thank you for your kind words
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hey! this is a great! very sad, but the majority of goodbyes are sad. you've worded this very well! well done! great write! thanks for entering my contest, and good luck! love lulu xxx
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lovely
this is a lovely work. your diction and choice of imagery give the poem such ease and elegance. very nice. it was a joy to read. june -
Saying goodbye is never a easy thing to do. Especially if the person left without reason and you had to make your heart let go. This is were I have been for the pass 9 months. Trying to say goodbye to yester years. You did a great job of portraying the pain of saying goodbye. I felt every word tear into my heart. That makes this one hell of a poem in my book. Great write. Keep up the great work.
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Thank you Kate, you always have such a beautiful way of expressing yourself, it is kind of you
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Thank you Ash I appreciate your kind words
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Thanks, perhaps I should change the title to " A moment in time " ?
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Thank you Mary, it is much appreciated
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I have yet to meet a person with no feelings Thank you for your kind words, whether they came willingly or not
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Thank you Leo I am glad you enjoyed it
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mmmmmmm "Syanara" is a nice word ( dont think I spelt that right thanks for your comments
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Thank you for your kind words, they are much appreciated
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Thanks Jenp it is appreciated
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Thank you Please feel free
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Thank you
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You did a great job of portraying the pain of saying goodbye. It reminded me when I moved country, knowing that half the people I knew over there I would never be able to see again. Just as Leo said, you managed to nail the feeling just right. Goodbyes are just too hard. The end lines really threw me:
"whilst hurt whispers back
goodbye."
Those lines were just so sad and compassionate. Thankyou for sharing this beautiful piece, it brought back a few memories. Take care and good luck. Kate
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That is a sweet and loving piece, I almost wanted to cry when I read the end, keep up the good work.
Ash* -
Cool
Yeah, I beleive it is too short for the title too. It's very sweet and beautifully written. It showed a powerful emotion. Keep up the good work cutiepie!!! -
good!
yes.. it is short for the title, but i like. You could think about this poem in so many ways and take it different ways.. i tink that's what i was trying to say.. think about it in different ways. lol.. well, i think it's good. good job!
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Hmm, very sad in a way, made me feel which is a hard thing to do. I think I liked this quite well..
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At first I thought this was going to be about losing someone to alheimer's disease (the long goodbye). But losing anyone forever is a sad long goodbye. This poem nailed that feeling precisely. Thanks for sharing it with me.
Sincerely,
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Oh good word usage in this piece. Goodbyes suck and that word should be banned in my book. But I s'pose everything comes to an end at some point but is there any need for to say a goodbye? How bout farewell see ya later or something?
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Wonderful
I know how sad it is to say goodbye..well, sometimes we have to and we must understand if somebody says so...I love the melacholic tone here, I know all goodbye's must be sad, but you give such sadness that it pierced the heart little by little...anyway..great work!
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I like this. It's so sad to have to say goodbye, no one likes them. I think you did a nice job with this
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Ashley and ashley give it 2 thumbs up!!!
Great job on this piece.I really like it.I look forward to checking out more of your work.Keep up the good work. -
oh i really like this. its such a relation to how i feel almost every day. thanks for posting.
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Exquisite
Aaahhh! I know goodbyes like this, very painful, you penned this exquisitely... you don't know how much i relate to this thank you for sharing! ~penumbrapoet
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Thank you Elsie Perhaps reflects time rather than present? I will indeed ponder......
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This is good, and although sweet, it seems much too short for the title - it says "Long goodbye" and I think you should delve into the feeling of it more. Short, but beautiful nonetheless. Keep up the good work!
~Elsie
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