Each night- I curtsy,
my trembling hand taken
by Clemency in dance;
We waltz long side
Venus and Cherubim
to Sonatas in Minor D.
brazen in Pearled burlesque,
Yellow shadows loom past
smokey canyons
funnels of onyx silk
on speckled walls of fire.
my toes follow on Giant feet-
stroll in His licorice dome,
our cameos against the
Ivory Moon;
encirled by a myriad of astral beams,
angels bathe in suds of
seashell pink
kiss neath the florid swirl;
they blow their silvered bubbles
through the hall Chalcedony.
The Groom dips my heart
this way,
then over there
that way
in perfect Lead;I bow till
Ebony sinks
behind rising Golden gates;
and Mercy dons His white tuxedo
above another sun.
Author notes
Inspired by "Song Of Songs" 5:10-16, NLT
The embodiment of God.
Foreign terms:
( Chalcedony ) Any cryptocrystalline quartz, although generally only used for white inspired by the History of astronomy, International Tropical Timber Agreement 1983.
Oh, the Promise of the Real Love who woos me!
Written August 7th, 2004
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A contest entry
- Biblical Poetry by loveasyouareloved.
500 points, ended May 5, 2007, 24 entries
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Beautifully and imaginatively penned. Gorgeous imagery!
Good luck in the contest!
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WOW. Such beautiful words you have used in your poem. The vocabulary is superb. My poems are never so dep and glittery. Haha. I mean, the words you use in your poem just make it TASTEgood. I dunno can't explain it. Even if it didn't make sense and wasn't about anything, if you used words like onyx, burlesque and astral everybody would still think it was beautiful! I love the description of the dance, it seemed so dreamlike, like hoe you really feel when you're dancing with someone you love!
I like also how it can be two things: It can be about two humans in a heavenly love, or it can be a description of God as the groom and us the bride. Which way did you mean it exactly? But either way it is beautiful, and I love it.
One part that evokes meaning in me, is the part: my toes follow on Giant feet-
I have no idea what you mean there, but what I imagine is a little girl standing on her father's feet as he twirls her around. And that is how I feel about God, and how I wish I could dance with Him.
Thank you for your beutiful poem and for entering my contest!
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deep
awwwwwwwww auntie I LOVED this write...I loved the flow and everything. You've done a wonderful job on this. I am hooked on your works
Kari -
Such beauty in your chosen words! You make life a dance, it wraps the reader in tenderness and expectancy; and what a ballroom in "His licorice dome", cameoed against the "ivory moon"! And the Groom cometh! Such aspirations of heaven, to be held by Him, dancing out of darkness to the golden gates. The metaphor is awesome. Thank you for sharing.
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I wish i could word things so eliquantly , you seem to have a very good vocabulary and manage to mixed it with verse really well and succeeed where so many others dont, thankyou for sharing
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beautiful poem ! this was great~! nicejob and keep writing!
~erika~
~plz comment on one of my poems,thanks~! -
Thoroughly Divine
Dearest Dianne
What a Divine Dance you are part of - I just KNOW this adoration; this sheer surrendering speechlessness, so aptly verbalized by the Queen of Spiritual Songs of Praise! You are masterful in the selection of poetic devices to enhance your own voice. What a poetic flair you've got, my friend!
And yes: "Curtsy" this is - I cannot think of a title more suitable.
Myra
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Hi, Sherry. You explored this well. It's mostly the first idea, but it can mean all of the above.
I'm glad you like it. Thank you, darlin'!!! Love, CookieZeal/DB
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A childs perfect love, and the Lords perfect love and that all comes together in a harmony with you. You and little Korinne dance or you and Uncle T under a spiritual foundation of unity with him...the Lord....Oh im getting to deep over my own thoughts of thinking...ahead of myself or in wrong ball park....
the uncondtional love of a child the lord your husband and you all together in harmony....Oh Im off and thinking to much LOL........well gave it a shoot from the different friend of the Gump family
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Lovely write Cookie, and romantic like....I realised the Lord was in this and nature was it about you and Him alone or Uncle T in this with you and the Lord...at first I thought it was about you and Korinne of a childs love and you two play by dancing and sharing time together but thisis much to deep lol you would made it more simple if it had been written about her guess its where my mind sees her little hand reaching out to you that childs love...(sorry) sometimes its just my backwards left right unbalenced brain...Lovely write deep but beautiful.
Hugs,Sherry -
Sometimes when i read you, i sit back in my chair and wonder how the heck did she come up with that ? lol You have such a unique way of seeing things, such original imagery... you show me things in ways i've never seen them before.
Gorgeous writing, beautiful poem :-)
Enjoyed this,
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wow I loved the symbolism and eveyrthing, i had to read it twice to get the full effect!! loved it...keep on writing
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Ohhh.....well. I DO have a habit of saying too much sometimes. Perhaps the images are too striking to consume. Thank you for sharing...WArmly, CookieZeal
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the visual made me dizzy thinking of the dance.perfect.
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I feel like getting my tuxedo on now, only I do not have one. But I do have a photograph of myself in a rented one, not a pretty sight
A wonderful poetic dance.
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Why, thank you. You are kind!
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What a delightful picture you paint here. I could almost hear the music playing softly in the background and see those loving smiles, starry stares and graceful movements as you flitter across the floor. Simply enchanting!
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Too amazing for words
Oh wow. Wow. Wow. Getting over the shock of it. That was... beautiful. You used such imagery and spoke of everything as though it was precious. When you described everything diffrent adjetives were used, and diffrent words you wouldn't usually hear. This was a piece that was well written and beautiful. Most people like pieces but they aren't well-written, but this is deffinately a piece of beautiful self expression. I loved this. You did a wonderful job.
kiss neath the florid swirl,
blowing their silvered bubbles around us-
down the hall Chalcedony.
You spoke with such emotion and lightness. Such love and care, with a carefree touch, dazzled in beauty. Truley wonderful. I can't even describe how beatiful and amazing this piece was.
Love,
Melissa
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